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Ash

United States

Female. Youngest of six. Pretty (?), sarcastic, Tom-boyish, and very much a geek.

Message from Writer

I guess I should say honest feedback is best but nothing crazy brutal. That said, please don't go to the other extreme and try to spare my feelings. Be descriptive and truthful because I really want to improve.

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Ash (United States) published:

<Insert Clever Title Here>

PROMPT: That Sort of Person

She's the girl who'd wear heels so that her accidental mashing of your foot would feel like a dagger piercing your skin.

You know the girl I'm talking about - the kind that would make a nice spunky protagonist if she was hiding a fragile heart instead of a harsher layer of wit and mistrust.

He's the boy that would lie to you even if you called him out.

 

almost 3 years ago

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Ash (United States) reviewed:

Five Natives of the Other Realm

PROMPT: That Sort of Person

How close am I with my guesses? :)

almost 3 years ago

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Ash (United States) reviewed:

The Giveaway

PROMPT: Six-Word Story

I love your sense of humor.

almost 3 years ago

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Ash (United States) reviewed:

But it Didn't

PROMPT: Six-Word Story

I like the emotions you decided to convey. Rather than blunt sadness, regret, or anger, you establish a blend of emotions. Nice job!

almost 3 years ago

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Ash (United States) reviewed:

he didn't

PROMPT: Six-Word Story

Nice job!

almost 3 years ago

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Ash (United States) reviewed:

Sixteen

PROMPT: Six-Word Story

almost 3 years ago

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Ash (United States) reviewed:

Untitled

PROMPT: Six-Word Story

:)

almost 3 years ago

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Ash (United States) reviewed:

Locks

PROMPT: Open Prompt

I really liked this piece. There weren't that many errors, but you need to pay attention to what exactly you're trying to convey to your readers. Your descriptions are beautiful, but be aware that lengthy descriptions can sometimes end up...

almost 3 years ago

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Ash (United States) reviewed:

The Car Ride

PROMPT: Open Prompt

Just some minor spelling and grammar errors. Nothing too major. Nice job!

almost 3 years ago

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Ash (United States) reviewed:

Publisher's Anxiety

PROMPT: Open Prompt

I really love this piece because I'm in the same boat as you. Granted, I've gotten better, but when I stop to think, 'huh, I just published this,' my next thought is immediately, 'oh dear god, what have I done?'...

almost 3 years ago