PROMPT: 25 Words
The title in all lowercase adds a nice touch, you could consider making the last line all lowercase too. Also maybe put the onomatopoeia italicized, but I like that it's in bold and the way it stands out in contrast to the rest of the paragraph. Same goes for the last line. Awesome job overall, I love the intensity of this short paragraph, and it leaves the reader (at least for me) with images and questions.