Amber Lightning

United States

Grade: 9th
Pronouns: She/Her
Likes: Skiing, Art & Music, Science & Space
Random Fact: I am missing an adult tooth

Message from Writer

I love suggestions, and if you review I'll review a piece of yours

Peer Reviews

the sacrifice

PROMPT: 25 Words

The title in all lowercase adds a nice touch, you could consider making the last line all lowercase too. Also maybe put the onomatopoeia italicized, but I like that it's in bold and the way it stands out in contrast to the rest of the paragraph. Same goes for the last line. Awesome job overall, I love the intensity of this short paragraph, and it leaves the reader (at least for me) with images and questions.

22 days