Amber Lightning (United States) published:
PROMPT: Song Writing Competition 2021
First deception past perfection
The anticipation friction
Don’t we have the wrong perception?
Seen from another dimension?
Ask a question turn direction
Some don’t bother mention that when
You see your reflection think
The worlds out of your comprehension
They the people rise
Leaving tears in their wake
So they dream but when they wake
They can’t see their mistake
But they know the ache
Like a taking heartbreak
Though they see the light sinking
12 days ago
Amber Lightning (United States) reviewed:
PROMPT: 25 Words
The title in all lowercase adds a nice touch, you could consider making the last line all lowercase too. Also maybe put the onomatopoeia italicized, but I like that it's in bold and the way it stands out in contrast...
23 days ago