The name of the wind by marcsimonetti

David M.

United States

I'm just a regular wannabe writer. If you recognize the character from my profile picture, I just might love you. I think it may be my goal in life to try to answer the question "why?"

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Hey! I'm here to improve, so any and all feedback (even/especially negative) is fantastic!

The name of the wind by marcsimonetti

David M. (United States) reviewed:

Nalani

FREE WRITING

Very interesting! You do a good job of introducing your character, establishing an idyllic scene, and then shattering that in a way that makes me want to learn more about the world and about the characters and forces involved. There...

almost 4 years ago

The name of the wind by marcsimonetti

David M. (United States) reviewed:

Tension In The Car

FREE WRITING

This is actually a very nice story. I ended up nitpicking a lot of grammar things, but that's because you don't have any larger issues for me to focus on! You really do a great job of capturing the feeling...

almost 4 years ago

The name of the wind by marcsimonetti

David M. (United States) reviewed:

Lunch with the Devil

PROMPT: Open Prompt

Overall, I'd say this is pretty good! The characters are about as well-developed as you can expect them to be in a story this short, although it's never quite clear why the devil has such a personal interest in this...

almost 4 years ago

The name of the wind by marcsimonetti

David M. (United States) reviewed:

Second Star to the Right

PROMPT: Personal Narrative Competition 2015

I'm sorry I don't have more comments to offer... but this piece is just so good, I don't see any way to comment! I could color it yellow with "this image is incredible," but I don't think you need that....

almost 4 years ago

The name of the wind by marcsimonetti

David M. (United States) reviewed:

Umbra

PROMPT: Invisible Cities

Okay, here's the thing. You've written something is SO COOL. But I want/need so much more. Like, this city has such an interesting dynamic! But I have no idea what it looks like. All I know is that there are...

almost 4 years ago

The name of the wind by marcsimonetti
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almost 4 years ago

The name of the wind by marcsimonetti

David M. (United States) reviewed:

Elaria

PROMPT: Invisible Cities

This is a really cool image! The whole piece seems dedicated to delivering one image, that of a city shaped of amber. And the second-person narrative is a cool device for delivering that. That said, there isn't very much narrative....

almost 4 years ago

The name of the wind by marcsimonetti

David M. (United States) reviewed:

I Remember This

PROMPT: Story of a Scar

This is a touching and sad story. And the reflection is also well-structured: you go from broad reflection, to background information, to the specifics of how the scar was formed. There are some small things to pay attention to: tense...

almost 4 years ago

The name of the wind by marcsimonetti

David M. (United States) reviewed:

I Never Made It to the Interview

PROMPT: Polar Opposite

You do a good job bringing several different elements together in such a short piece. I've marked some of the times where you can work towards streamlining it more, stripping out redundancies and clarifying some things. But overall your piece...

almost 4 years ago

The name of the wind by marcsimonetti

David M. (United States) reviewed:

Just a speck of dust

PROMPT: Personal Narrative Competition 2015

You've written a very courageous piece! Statements like these are not easy statements to make, and yet you boldly write them out. The piece certainly could use a bit of work -- expanding it out, incorporating a scene from your...

almost 4 years ago