Cosmogyral
United States
'cosmogyral' means to twirl around the universe, but you can just call me caleb.
i have a fanclub, i don't know how to feel about that. be careful, dmoral might fight anyone who tries to remove her from her office as self-proclaimed president.
Message from Writer
soldier, poet or king?
Peer Reviews
Lonely Enough To Be Lovely
PROMPT: Novel Writing Competition 2020
Don't get sidetracked by separate plots of characters, if you stray too far, the piece will become disconnected. Happy writing! An indication of the initial word count (Minus the added title at the beginning) would be a helpful indicator to the reviewer of what they should suggest, it's just so we can keep in mind the initial wordcount while typing our suggestions, you don't have to, but if you do, feel free to type it into the footnotes. :) I apologize for nitpicking, but this is such a good plot to try out, and I am so happy I read it, if you find yourself with the time, please post this from chapter one!
2 months
In Which Les the Possum, Timothy Legonawy, and Trini Abasolo Abel are Caught in an Attic
PROMPT: Novel Writing Competition 2020
A quick word of advice, never publish the "First Draft", the two words together insist that not a single word of editing went into it. It makes it seem novice, and you want readers to know that you aren't any ol' novice, you're a tactful novice. I agree with Grammarly (sadly), the overall tone is formal, way too much for a kid in an attic in 2019, even in the south, it doesn't connect well enough to the readers. If you don't want to change the tone, you could change the time, I think the late 1880s suits this pretty okay, but that's just me, it was a good read. If you do, you could replace Anne with Huck Finn or Dr. Jeckyll and Mr. Hyde, the mid-1910s would also be perfect if you want to keep Anne, but then you might need to add the international tension and conflict. I apologize for nitpicking, I don't like sugar-coating my opinion too much. I hope you see this as constructive criticism because that's what I intended (but I'm told I'm rather daft at sparing feelings, lmao). Stay cool!
2 months
I need help! (No, really, I need help with something)
FREE WRITING
You'll be fine. I don't like sugar-coating my opinions
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When you learn to listen to the call of the bigger things, the present begins to fade.
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Words that will never make Sense (Explanation in footnotes aka project idea)
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And about the footnote, the project sounds fun, but I simply do not that the heart to rip out a page of a book ( never have, lmao). If you go for it, I think you could develop a unique writing style such as this, something that has to make the reader think. Your title says that it makes no sense, but that's the beauty of it. I find it clear and intelligible, whether or not that was your intention, I'm kind of jealous of how well the concept was executed.
2 months
blood / mouth
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normally, i hate repetition, it's almost never done right, but you're a natural bradbury.
2 months
When I look to the world ... [FINAL]
PROMPT: Speechwriting Competition 2020
Stay passionate, you're doing great. Suggestions are just suggestions, and that's all a review is. I really hope to at least see this at least as a finalist.
3 months
(litter)ature
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I love this work, thanks for sharing it! I will now go forth and commit myself to mind-trash.
3 months
Demon Dance||Review for Review
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It's beautiful, really, thank you for sharing. I look forward to your next work.
3 months
How hard it is
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It's an incredibly powerful piece, the change of smiling to not life an evergreen in the desert is amazing. I'm stunned by the smooth transition you play in this. You're doing great <3
4 months
Cosmic Love Dies Too
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you're doing great, this work has such wonderful potential. be confident in your work, this is all constructive criticism.
4 months
German and Jew | Draft #5 | Review for Review
PROMPT: Historical Fiction Competition 2020
Review for review? :/ You're doing great btw, let me know if you'll write another draft for comment.
4 months
Across the world
PROMPT: Historical Fiction Competition 2020
Any sentences i highlighted and rewrote, they're merely suggestions, this review is just constructive criticism.
4 months
The Last Watch of The Knight.
PROMPT: Historical Fiction Competition 2020
I didn't really go past the archer's point, it's easy to apply what I said to the rest of the story.
4 months
Class Antics
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None at the moment, can't wait to read again if you plan a continuation.
4 months
Storyteller
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It started off well, but the over use of the pronoun 'He' made it come off dense. If you plan a reread or continuation, could you experiment a little by using occupations or nouns such as 'the story-teller' or so other. The point of view is all over the place, so it's understandable if you didn't want to keep up. It would be great if you'd left it as the author/narrator's point of view, it might even give a different tone to the story.
4 months
Euphoria
FREE WRITING
A little bit of grammar touch-ups here and there, and some shifts in the punctuation, and I think you'll be pretty fine. It's a good piece.
9 months
Bird of Hope
PROMPT: Poetry and Spoken Word Competition 2020
Have you ever read Sara Teasdale?
9 months