Mariam17

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Mariam17 (United States) published:

We Never Raised Our Hands

PROMPT: Novel Writing Competition 2020

“Ralph Geoffrey told me about you,” Chase explained, reading my mind.

I finally understood what the tabloids were saying. He was attractive, yes, but there was more to it than that. His presence filled up a room. He had more power in one word than most people had in entire speeches.

And there was the way his eyes lingered on me. I swore I could feel him stare right through my ratty shirt. I reached towards my couch, grabbing a...

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Mariam17 (United States) published:

We Never Raised Our Hands

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“Ralph Geoffrey told me about you,” Chase explained, reading my mind.

I finally understood what the tabloids were saying. He was attractive, yes, but there was more to it than that. His presence filled up a room. He had more power in one word than most people had in entire speeches.

And there was the way his eyes lingered on me. I swore I could feel him stare right through my ratty shirt. I reached towards my couch, grabbing a...

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10 months ago

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Mariam17 (United States) published:

Vigilante

PROMPT: Flash Fiction Competition 2020

    "Please, don't! I'll do anything. Just don't hurt him!" The mother's cry pierced the cold, dead air, and my gaze flicked between the little boy and the woman.

    I was transported to another world, where another woman was crying out while I clutched her leg with small, pudgy fingers. 

    "I'll do anything, just don't hurt me!" 

    The sleek, black, metal gun pressed against my calloused fingers and scarred palms. I was wrong to choose this woman....

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about 1 year ago

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Mariam17 (United States) published:

Vigilante

PROMPT: Flash Fiction Competition 2020

    "Please, don't! I'll do anything. Just don't hurt him!" The mother's cry pierced the cold, dead air, and my gaze flitted between the little boy and the woman.

    I was transported to another world, where another woman was crying out while I clutched her leg with small, pudgy fingers. 

    "I'll do anything, just don't hurt me!" 

    The sleek, black, metal gun pressed against my calloused fingers and scarred palms. I was wrong to choose this woman....

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about 1 year ago

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Mariam17 (United States) published:

Vigilante

PROMPT: Flash Fiction Competition 2020

    "Please, don't! I'll do anything. Just don't hurt him!" The mother's cry pierced the cold, dead air, and my gaze flicked between the little boy and the woman.

    I was transported to another world, where another woman was crying out while I clutched her leg with small, pudgy fingers. 

    "I'll do anything, just don't hurt me!" 

    The sleek, black, metal gun pressed against my calloused fingers and scarred palms. I was wrong to choose this woman....

about 1 year ago

Mariam17 (United States) published:

The Four Seasons

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    Rosie had been waiting for December 21st for an eternity.
    December 21st was the day she would finally be reunited with her love. With William.
She rubbed red powder over her lips. She used her fingers to comb through her raven hair. Her skin was a pasty white, so she tried to liven up the color with a little blush. She wore her best dress.
    At the same time, a few miles away, he smoothed his blonde hair back. He...

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about 1 year ago

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Mariam17 (United States) reviewed:

The Desaki--Chapter 1 (Go find chapter 2 too!)

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My main complaint is with the two info-dumps I pointed out but that can be easily fixed by just scattering those sentences throughout the book. When you write that Zelda's the lowest, you can say "Her name had started with...

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