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jeily

Hong Kong

dreaming about writing 25/7
actually writing 3/7

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Blooded Secrets

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I don't really have very many comments as to what you could improve, but I would say it would be really interesting to see if you could experiment with how you layout your poetry (if that's your main focus) as this poem goes in a very sequential, almost linear plotline, but I think it would also be nice to see if there was a little jumble in the stanzas and line as if the narrator is unreliable or whatnot. I saw you already had a few reviews, but this was just too good to not review! Really well done with this piece, it's absolutely stunning.

18 days ago