nelson7264

United States

I'm Nelson. I'm a high schooler, and I'm just looking for a place to put my hobby (writing) and work on improving it. My goal when I graduate is to go to school and become a High School English Teacher. looking for any helpful critiques :)

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nelson7264 (United States) published:

the good ones

PROMPT: Novel Writing Competition 2020

Leo

Pale yellow and pastel pink. Those were his colors. They curled around louder colors, and swirled through the darkest ones, disarming them. With each breath, his swirls of calming pink and yellow made other colors fade and soften.  No matter how angry the others looked, his colors made them weak. They were… exceptional. That’s why it was so hard to see him gone. Just… gone. No warning, no last words. He just left us, left me. And I hate...
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nelson7264 (United States) reviewed:

Raphael and Maya

FREE WRITING

I would play around with sentence/paragraph structure, too. Sometimes we as writers fall into the infinite comma trap. We tend to list things, like this, or add more details, until all of our grammar is just a bunch of constant...

6 months ago

nelson7264 (United States) liked Raphael and Maya by BizzleWrites (Australia)

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nelson7264 (United States) published:

the good ones

PROMPT: Novel Writing Competition 2020

Leo
Pale yellow and pastel pink. Those were his colors. They curled around louder colors, and swirled through the darkest ones, disarming them. With each breath, his swirls of calming pink and yellow made other colors fade and soften.  No matter how angry the others looked, his colors made them weak. Other colors never felt the need to fight back, for his colors were much prettier. They were… exceptional. He taught me that word. Taught me everything. That’s why it...
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6 months ago