Daisy

United States

-Musician
-Big sister to 5 younger siblings
-Baking enthusiast
-Book addict
-Aspiring author
-Member of the Church of Jesus Christ of Latter-day Saints

Message from Writer

"You can't go back and change the beginning, but you can start where you are and change the ending."
- C.S. Lewis

Peer Reviews

A Seed of Hope

PROMPT: Poetry and Spoken Word Competition 2020

4 months

The Perils of Growing Up

PROMPT: Six-Word Memoir

Great job! I really liked your piece.

4 months

THE REASON I'M HERE

PROMPT: Poetry and Spoken Word Competition 2020

4 months

Earth spins on in an eternal orbit - I pass the pen to you and let the stars carry me away

FREE WRITING

Great work! This truly was an amazing series. I love how you left the rest to our imaginations.

about 1 year

Windows in the Sky

PROMPT: Cosmic Creations

This is an interesting thought. You could turn this into a plot for the Fantasy competition if you wanted. Great writing!

about 1 year

Dream Whispers

PROMPT: Fantasy Writing Competition 2019

Don't be afraid to use your descriptive language! Really pull on it! I always dream very vividly so I think your piece would really thrive with vivid language!

about 1 year

my friend, the ocean

PROMPT: Water Body

Keep on writing! You have a gift.

about 1 year

something hidden

FREE WRITING

Great poem! I love it when I read something thought provoking.

about 1 year

The Glowing River

PROMPT: Fantasy Writing Competition 2019

Just be careful of balancing being in Asa's thoughts and describing it from outside of her.

about 1 year

Part 1 of Chapter 1 of 'Clue Me In" (Co-author: Christy.Wisdom)

FREE WRITING

I don't really have anything to say here. Just great idea and keep writing! I'm excited to see how the story continues!

about 1 year

Words

PROMPT: Open Prompt

This was a great first piece! Simple yet powerful. Good luck with your writing!

about 1 year

No Good Solider

FREE WRITING

I really enjoyed reading this! Keep writing!

about 1 year

Beginnings With No End

PROMPT: Five Beginnings

These are some really great opening lines. They really have great potential to make amazing stories! Great job and keep writing!

about 1 year

The Forest Scholar

PROMPT: Poetry and Spoken Word Competition 2019

I would like it if it were a little longer. Maybe a stanza about courting her, one about finding her dead, something along those lines.

about 1 year

The Doubt

FREE WRITING

This was a really good haunting poem about doubt. Great job and keep writing!

about 1 year

Fissured Past, Fixed Future

PROMPT: Fissure

Great job! Keep writing!

about 1 year

Returning

PROMPT: Returning

You are great with imagery, just be careful of long sentences. It is mostly better to not try and pack so many words into one sentence.

about 1 year

Easy Forgiveness

PROMPT: Imagine This

This was a sweet little piece. I enjoyed reading it. There was great imagery and I wanted it to keep going. Good job!

about 1 year

Rejecting the False Dichotomy Surrounding Social Media

PROMPT: Unplugged: Op-Ed Competition

You might want to change your sentences that start with "and" or "but". They make a point, but they don't fit with the technical tone of the rest of the piece.

about 1 year

Unplugged: A Life Without Social Media

PROMPT: Unplugged: Op-Ed Competition

I don't know if you meant to do this, but you didn't indent your first paragraph.

about 1 year

The magic of bread

PROMPT: Food Writing Competition 2019

You might want to break up some of your sentences. There were a couple times where the meaning was lost because the sentence got too long and rambling. Good paper! I can't wait to read more from you!

about 1 year

Food and Family

PROMPT: Food Writing Competition 2019

I like to read my papers out loud to help create a better flow in the sentences. That might be helpful for you, I don't know :) Keep writing! You have a talent for it.

about 1 year

Bread

PROMPT: Food Writing Competition 2019

I would read this through out loud and change some of your sentences so that they are longer. It is just a tad choppy for all of the short/medium sentences.

about 1 year

Spicy Happiness

PROMPT: Food Writing Competition 2019

Just be careful of your grammar and punctuation. Otherwise, great job! I really enjoyed reading this piece.

about 1 year

Tomaeto, Tomato

PROMPT: Food Writing Competition 2019

Your transitions between thoughts are kind of abrupt. I would try making them a little smoother.

about 1 year

Bumblebee Bats

PROMPT: Earth Day Writing Competition 2019

Maybe work on your intro. I don't have any specific ideas, it just felt a little abrupt and incomplete.

over 1 year

The Plastic Straw Problem- PROMPT TWO SUSTAINABILITY AND INNOVATION (PROPOSAL)

PROMPT: Earth Day Writing Competition 2019

Don't be afraid of short sentences. They help keep variety in your writing.

over 1 year

We're drowning in /the heat/ our inaction/ also, deep water

PROMPT: Earth Day Writing Competition 2019

It would be nice if there was a call to action, instead of just telling us of impending doom. Also, you have a great vocabulary! I liked your wide variety of words. I like how carefully chosen they all were.

over 1 year

Save Yourself

PROMPT: Earth Day Writing Competition 2019

Another thing you could add was something about animals and how we are affecting them.

over 1 year

A Wildfire

PROMPT: Earth Day Writing Competition 2019

Again, just add more information. You are brief to the point of confusion. Write more! Use enough words that you can explain what you mean.

over 1 year

Surviving the Storm

PROMPT: Earth Day Writing Competition 2019

I would have liked it if your ending was a little stronger. Except for the last sentence, it didn't really feel like a conclusion. Also, why didn't you indent any of your paragraphs? That isn't very important, but i wondered. I think it helps guide the reader down the page if the paragraphs are indented.

over 1 year

Many Years Ago

PROMPT: Earth Day Writing Competition 2019

I would like a little more description of the contrast between the sunshine of those past days, and the gloom of the current days.

over 1 year

I Challenge You

PROMPT: Earth Day Writing Competition 2019

Personally, I don't think it's a good idea to start a sentence with the word "and."

over 1 year

Smoke

PROMPT: Earth Day Writing Competition 2019

Maybe use more long sentences. Short sentences are forceful, but they get too choppy if their is too many of them.

over 1 year

Climate Change Catastrophe

PROMPT: Earth Day Writing Competition 2019

Try and be a little more forceful with your emotions. Help the reader feel what you are feeling.

over 1 year