ruzahk

Australia

uni student from perth, studying philosophy.

ruzahk (Australia) reviewed:

Campfires

PROMPT: Flash Fiction Competition 2019

I've left a few highlights just related to general phrasing and grammar, just some ways you might potentially be able to create a smooth and atmospheric flow and build suspense. These are of course just suggestions!

over 1 year ago

ruzahk (Australia) reviewed:

A Never-Ending Fight

PROMPT: Flash Fiction Competition 2019

I think perhaps you could remove a lot of the detail of the fight in the second 'paragraph' - "Jiva raised her hand" all the way through to "Fire hit her in the chest." Because this is a flash piece,...

over 1 year ago

ruzahk (Australia) reviewed:

In The Guise Of Love - A poem about curiosity

PROMPT: A Trillion Trees

I think perhaps to deepen your emotional exploration in this poem, and also to possibly connect more with the prompt, you might benefit from potentially trying to rephrase some of your emotional language. You tend to lean towards quite explicitly...

over 1 year ago

ruzahk (Australia) reviewed:

Last Day at the Office

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Most of the feedback here is on general phrasing or grammar stuff, but your overall broad approach to the piece is really good. Keep it up and definitely apply these skills and observations to other pieces of writing that you...

over 1 year ago

ruzahk (Australia) reviewed:

Winter

PROMPT: Flash Fiction Competition 2019

The piece does read a bit like the start to a longer story. I think it's very good as an introductory chapter or beginning to something else. But maybe just as a challenge or something to play around with, you...

over 1 year ago

ruzahk (Australia) reviewed:

Strongest Bonds - What I've got so far anyway

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You could perhaps do something about the distinctive sound of John's walking alerting Sherlock it was him. Remember, he used to have a cane due to a psychosomatic limp! (In the BBC series, not necessarily in the original stories, but...

over 1 year ago

ruzahk (Australia) reviewed:

Time Difference

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I've highlighted some areas where perhaps you might want to try some other phrasings or arrangements, as when I read the poem out loud these parts might have not sounded as 'flowing' as others. For the most part though this...

over 1 year ago

ruzahk (Australia) reviewed:

The sun lost...

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Well done on creating such as strong and beautiful, comforting mood through such a simple little poem. I feel like I'm getting some real Rupi Kaur/Beau Taplin kind of influences coming through here, but I like how this has been...

over 1 year ago

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ruzahk (Australia) reviewed:

SHORT STORY SAMPLE (PLEASE REVIEW)

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Off to a really great start. Your language and vocabulary is very classic and clear, but at the same time carries a lot of subtlety which is important for a horror text. I also like how you have drawn the...

over 1 year ago