Overall, this piece sounds beautiful. If your aim was to mystify, you did that extremely well. This could be written to be more engaging and clear, if I were to give any criticism.
This poem makes me imagine a tailor (because of the "blouses") who lives in a dystopia. Why a tailor, though? There has to be a more relevant title. "Weak" might describe the final line, but is that line meant to have so much emphasis? It doesn't seem like the entire poem hinges on that one line. For example "Nightmare" might be a better descriptive title. It refers to the crisis AND the sleeping. It's just an example, though.
I LOVE THE TITLE! Introduces the mood well and invites readers to read like so. Brilliant!
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