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Okay wow this is one of my favorite things ever thanks for writing it you're doing great! I would love to be able to write like you, you have a wonderful talent. Keep sharing it! If you have any questions just let me know
9 months
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This was so sweet! One of my favorite characters was the teacher, she was so perfect. The description you used was superb, the writing was top notch! I didn't notice any grammar errors or anything, keep writing! Write free!
9 months
PROMPT: Poetry and Spoken Word Competition 2019
Keep working, this was so beautiful! I loved the picture you painted, you nailed the feelings. Best of luck!
9 months
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Creative spin on this way of writing. The use of italics and capitalization was pretty, overall you drew me in and kept me interested. Keep writing! If you have any questions or anything, I'll be here
9 months
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Well written and pleasing to read. A few grammar mistakes here and there, but overall well written. Can't wait to read more of your stuff!
9 months
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This was super creative! I liked how meandering it was at first then it came together. A few minor changes for grammar and stuff, but keep writing! Can't wait to read more of your stuff
9 months
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A few changes to the wording will go a long way. I was in love with the rhythm of this piece, the idea was fantastic, all in all very well done! Keep writing my friend
9 months
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Overall pretty good! A few minor changes here and there to make the wording flow better and the description stronger will go a long way. Keep writing!
9 months
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This was so awesome! The only thing I didn't particularly love was the swearing. I know, compared to the other pieces, this was practically G, but still, it's a sore spot for me. Overall, great job! I'm sorry, I don't highlight much, but there was so much here I didn't know where to start! Write Free, palindrome
about 2 years
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I didn't understand for the most part what you were trying to say. A few clarifications here and there would make sense. Other than that, this was really creative and cool! Write Free, palindrome
about 2 years
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Overall this is a great poem, and I really liked the title! This is beautiful, about letting go and moving on, even though it is difficult.
about 2 years
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I really liked how applicable this is. Take art, for instance, 'Mona Lisa' is pretty, but if you understand that what Leonardo Da Vinci was doing was so unconventional and different, it gave the painting a whole new level of beauty. A damaged person still has worth, still is perfectly imperfect, and has the will and strength of a survivor.
about 2 years
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I really enjoyed how you used sentences to describe what is going on. Instead of saying, "I hated the freckles I had on my nose." you did a very great job with using description instead of describing. I would indent the beginning of each paragraph, but that is the only problem with grammar I could find. The uplifting last paragraph is something we all could use today. I am totally going to quote you on the last lines!! Write Free, palindrome
about 2 years
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I really liked how you took the darker side of love: jealousy and envy, and put them into your writing. Great job!
about 2 years
PROMPT: Polar Opposite
This is such a different perspective than we normally read. It's really creative! Great job and keep writing!
about 2 years
FREE WRITING
I think maybe change Apple/Peacock's nickname a tad. I love where you are going with this, but Aco doesn't make much sense. I really hope you make this a series!
about 2 years
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This is such a poignant piece! I love the ocean, and you wrote so beautifully. I particularly enjoyed how you arranged every other stanza's sentences. Had a pleasing visual effect. Keep writing!
about 2 years
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I love the point of view you chose- it makes it more personal, even if the readers don't realize it. Great job, keep writing!
about 2 years
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One tip I find very important for novel writers is to let the story tell itself. For example, instead of saying, "Pam was very tired with bags under her eyes." You might say, "Pam dragged herself down the stairs, rubbing her bloodshot eyes." This is sounding great!
about 2 years
FREE WRITING
There were some spelling mistakes, but nobody is perfect. One thing that was a little distracting from the beauty of the writing was the exclamation marks. Maybe a little less, but overall good job!
about 2 years
FREE WRITING
So for the Corner Writing Club, we are reviewing partners. I will review a piece of yours every week and vice versa. I look forward to reading more of your work!
about 2 years
PROMPT: Novel Writing Competition 2018
I highlighted the part I would take out. Good job! Keep writing...
over 2 years
PROMPT: We Forget
Nice beginning and ending! I was drawn right in from the start and captivated till the end.
over 2 years
PROMPT: Once the World Was...
In the story, life flows from the sun. In reality, life flows from the sun. I like the comparisons! Very great job!
over 2 years
PROMPT: Open Prompt
Expound a little more! It sounds great so far, more wouldn't hurt.
over 2 years