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stormguard798

Singapore

TCG Player, Always Off-Pitch, and Uses Way Too Many Writing Tropes for their Own Good.

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stormguard798 (Singapore) reviewed:

Back Again

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Just as an aesthetic detail, maybe try to add lines between each paragraphs. I think that it makes it look less like a block of text and easier to read.

9 months ago

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stormguard798 (Singapore) reviewed:

Weak

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In general, you have the structure of the whirlwind of thoughts that the character is having, but I feel that you really need to add some detailed physical description to accompany each emotion. As you pointed out, it is a...

10 months ago

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stormguard798 (Singapore) reviewed:

Inner voices

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I personally feel that this scene would be much better if converted into a short story or extract as I feel that it can be more effectively emoted and described in a way that really resonates, I think that it's...

10 months ago

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stormguard798 (Singapore) reviewed:

Reverie

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One thing that works well about this piece is that it is effective as is as a story, with a satisfying beginning and ending, which is impressive within such a short span. However, I am concerned that the extract doesn't...

10 months ago

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stormguard798 (Singapore) published:

"Made to Be Broken" - Extract.

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    Jeremy was halfway across the lot when a familiar hand firmly grabbed his shoulder and spun him around. "What do you want?", he replied brusquely, his glance tilted upward to meet his significantly taller assailant.

    "We need to talk."

    "Please just fucking go away," Jeremy gritted his teeth, the sleeve of his leather jacket whipping away Ryan’s arm before crossing his own, scanning the distant cliques of classmates they may have seen them together. He couldn't afford...

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10 months ago

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stormguard798 (Singapore) published:

"Made to Be Broken" - Extract.

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    He was halfway to the bus stop when a hand firmly grabbed his shoulder and spun him around. "What do you want?" Jeremy thrusted his chin out to meet his assailant.

    "We need to talk."

    "We don’t have anything to talk about. So fucking go away." Jeremy gritted his teeth, swiping away Ryan’s arm, before crossing his own, scanning the pathway for anyone that might have spotted them together.

    "Not talking about it doesn’t mean that it...

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10 months ago

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stormguard798 (Singapore) reviewed:

Monster

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In direct response to your message, it was momentarily intriguing, but I felt it has the potential to become a lot more if it was developed.

10 months ago