Overall, I love this poem! I think you've captured a very small, specific moment, and made it very universal and meaningful for every reader. Keep up the good work, and I look forward to reading your future writing!

(Just a note that these comments are my personal opinion only. As the writer, you have full creative control over your piece, and you get to decide to what extent you implement my feedback). Overall, I was thoroughly impressed by...

Overall, congratulations on writing a poem that plays with structure, punctuation and formatting in a really clever and creative way. If you were looking for some inspiration on physically innovative poems, I'd check out ee cummings (one of my all-time...

Congratulations on writing a really unique and effective story that deals with multiple layers of emotions! It's always very challenging to write about loss, because it's a raw emotion that's difficult to transfer onto the page. If you wanted some...

Overall, well done writing an expressive, unique story! I'd encourage you to expand on this very solid foundation by providing a little more detail, characteriation and plot, but at the end of the day, you've done a very good job....

Overall, I thoroughly enjoyed this piece! It was well-written with a unique concept, and I'd encourage you to keep writing!

Overall, keep up the good work! It was a pleasure to read your work.

Really well done tackling a very unique story idea! Firstly, I'd just like to say that you, as the reader, have full creative control over this piece - my suggestions are simply my personal opinion, and it's up to you...