PureHeart

United Kingdom

~ will you stay by my side, will you promise me? if i let go of your hand, you'll fly away and break ~

| joined August 16, 2018 |

Message from Writer

If you've come this far, thanks for reading. I'm very grateful that you've stumbled upon my writing, and whether that was intentional or an accident, I hope you enjoy.

And apologies for the potential (and certain) randomness.

Peer Reviews

Starstruck- draft 6 - (pls review)

PROMPT: Letter Writing Competition 2020

Keep up the good work. You've got some good ideas, but what would really give you the edge is if you expand on them!

4 days

dear frida | second draft

PROMPT: Letter Writing Competition 2020

Your expression of love for Frida Khalo is almost poetic in this piece. It flows so well with the language choices and techniques you've used, and it helps the readers to fall for her as much as you have.

5 days

You did not paint with blues//edited/hopefully improved//

FREE WRITING

This is thoroughly exceptional. I hadn't read the first version of this when I read it, but all I can say is this is a piece of art aand you should really be proud of this.

29 days

contradictions

FREE WRITING

You're on the right track, now all you have to do is zoom in on your thoughts of this topic. Keep up the good work.

about 2 months

language arts & crafts

FREE WRITING

Much like a paintbrush on a canvas, you've really made a piece of art with this piece. Beautifully done, can't wait to see what you come up with next.

2 months

They tell me

FREE WRITING

I think all of us have taken something from this poem. You have identified society's expectations, and how it inflicts on the way people view you. But you've told us what's important; disregarding society's beauty standards and appreciating what you have. Everyone is beautiful, there's no denying it. I probably sound fiddly optimistic, but it's true. There is always someone out there that loves the real you, so show it. You've done so well with this piece and I can't wait to see what you've come up with next time. Remember to always love yourself, as you have told us to do so.

3 months

Sleep

FREE WRITING

There's a lot to think about this topic, so you did well in choosing what to write about. Now what you need to do is expand on this. Keep up the good work!

3 months

the love is in the air

PROMPT: Poetry and Spoken Word Competition 2020

You've got a lot of potential with this poem. I would encourage you to expand your ideas so that the readers can appreciate your deep thoughts and speculation on a well-known topic.

3 months

Stars

PROMPT: Poetry and Spoken Word Competition 2020

This poem it's really enjoyable to read. It's ethereal and dreamy tone truly makes it beautiful and I hope people appreciate your delicate work.

3 months

Smile

PROMPT: Poetry and Spoken Word Competition 2020

Keep up the good work! You've got some good ideas and I appreciate your positive thinking and overwhelming optimism.

3 months

The New Reality

PROMPT: Poetry and Spoken Word Competition 2020

3 months

A blank page

PROMPT: Poetry and Spoken Word Competition 2020

I appreciate your untraditional approach to this poetry task. This poem isn't structured as a 'normal' poem would be (e.g. rhyming/rhythm patterns) and its very unique. But I would recommend in the future to deepen your amazing ideas with more languages devices and colourful vocabulary, so the reader has clear sight of the theme/experience you're presenting in your poetry.

3 months

Winter warmth

FREE WRITING

Very nice and interesting approach to writing about an underrated time of year.

3 months

These Tears of Mine

FREE WRITING

Very insightful poem. I like the different meaning it conveys and it certainly makes the readers think. Well done!

4 months

Beautiful mess

PROMPT: Novel Writing Competition 2019

Honestly, I'm not surprised if you win this competition. I think everyone should read this piece and learn from your, I dare say, perfect example.

8 months

When We All Fall Asleep Where Do We Go? album review

PROMPT: Album Review Competition 2019

9 months

Little Fireflies Everywhere

PROMPT: Flash Fiction Competition 2019

11 months

glazed eyes; glass hearts

PROMPT: Flash Fiction Competition 2019

11 months

Bittersweet Endings

PROMPT: Flash Fiction Competition 2019

11 months

Cola

PROMPT: Flash Fiction Competition 2019

11 months

The Room

FREE WRITING

You have an intriguing way of writing. I'd like to see your progress, and what more you can do. Hope you have a good day!

about 1 year

WITHDRAWN

FREE WRITING

Keep up the good work!

about 1 year

child again

PROMPT: Tweet-Tales

I thoroughly enjoyed this piece. In a couple of sentences, you've sparked a variety of thoughts and feelings into the hearts of your readers. Very well thought-out.

about 1 year

the dawn of mourning

PROMPT: Season-a-Changing

From flowers and beauty, to dying and ending, you really know how to manipulate the readers feelings through contrasting words. This is a very good tactic to use for a writer. Keep up the good work!

about 1 year

Am I Insane? ReWrite

FREE WRITING

Can't wait to see more of what you can do. Welcome to Write the World, and I hope you have a good day!

about 1 year

The Grade...?

PROMPT: Raining Cats and... Question Marks?

Really enjoyed reading this piece. It is hard to right a whole writing piece using only questions, but the way you approached this prompt was very creative.

about 1 year

she was icarus and the sun

FREE WRITING

Very good piece. I was drawn to it because of its romantic mood, and the way you incorporated so many feelings into this poem is really moving.

about 1 year

Cracks Beneath Me

PROMPT: Fissure

There are a lot of writers on this website who have limited vocabulary, which, unfortunately makes their writing less enjoyable. Don't lose your spark of creativity!

about 1 year

morning

PROMPT: Dictionary Title

Love the way your perspective changes from the outside world to the inside world, where we meet your character. The way you structured this was beautiful, and it seemed to flow. Perhaps you did this to connect the readers with the idea of rain/water, and the way it flows too? Your choice of vocabulary is close to perfection! You weren't overdoing it, but you chose your moments to hit the readers with sophistication. I think it is worth expanding the characters aesthetic a bit more, just so the readers get a real feel about who the character is. Check out some of the comments I put in the highlighted bits of your piece. I do appreciate it is a short story and you had to limit your words, but you did very well in prioritizing the important things in this piece. Overall, very strong short story. Well done.

about 1 year

140 Characters or Less

PROMPT: Tweet-Tales

I appreciate this is your first time writing something like this. You did a really good job, especially considering you didn't know whst you were doing but had a go anyway. Its good to take risks when writing something creative, and I'm glad you have written this piece!

about 1 year

PLEASE REVIEW

FREE WRITING

Hope to see more stuff like this from you in the future! Have a good day.

about 1 year

Dying Leaves

PROMPT: Season-a-Changing

This piece has delighted me! You have a very unique way of writing haiku poems. Hope you do more piece likes this.

about 1 year

love is #escapril

FREE WRITING

Very nicly done, and a captivating read. Cheered me up a little, actually! Have a nice day.

about 1 year

savior complex

FREE WRITING

I'm in love with your writing. I find it intoxicatingly satisfying and I will do well to recommend you to people if they need to get their hands on a good read. Can't wait to read more of your writing!

about 1 year

Mirror

FREE WRITING

You are clearly a natural writer and seem to know your stuff! Don't let anyone take that away from you.

about 1 year

Contagion

FREE WRITING

Your writing is very enjoyable to read. Can't wait to see what else you can do!

about 1 year

Mesmerized #ghostlycontest

FREE WRITING

Never have I been so satisfied on reading such a fine piece of work! At least I know who to come for when I'm in need of sophisticated vocabulary! I am truly 'mesmerized!'

over 1 year

Charity Case - Prologue

FREE WRITING

Very good piece of work and I'm looking forward to your other pieces of writing!

over 1 year

us

PROMPT: Keep the Ball Rolling

Beautiful, romantic, and with its own rhythm. Very unique descriptions and ideas; definitely keeping the ball rolling!

over 1 year

A (Potentially) Bad Idea

FREE WRITING

Very clever rhyming scheme. I like how your rhymes made sense, and you didn't just add certain words to make it rhyme, like some people do. Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

a simple recipe for 2019

PROMPT: 2019

Keep up the great work! Write the World is lucky to have such a unique, creative and imaginative writer like you!

over 1 year

ubiquitous

PROMPT: Emotion without Feeling

Love the way you ended off each paragraph with two adjectives, just to give the reader a chance to breath, but alos, short sentences/phrases come in handy when you are trying to scare your readers. Very impressive piece of work! I can see your raw, natural talent breaking through, each time I read your writings.

over 1 year

crush

FREE WRITING

This is one of my favourite pieces of writing I have ever read, no joke! I love how relatable it is, and I love how the reader feels like they know the narrator themselves, as they get an insight on what they are feeling about different things. Very interesting and a joy to read. Keep up the great work!

over 1 year

maybe we're a little more than just friends

FREE WRITING

Its always a pleasure to read your writing, and I can't wait to see more of your pieces! You've got a real, natural talent! Keep up the fantastic work!

over 1 year

Addicted

FREE WRITING

Very interesting topic; its like a slightly twisted, but intimate take on romance. You come up with such interesting ideas, and I'd love to read more of your pieces!

over 1 year

Lone Wolves

FREE WRITING

Very interesting topic to approach for the poem. Looking forward to seeingnyour other pieces of writing. Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

Not so bad

FREE WRITING

Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

#candleflame I felt hope

FREE WRITING

I felt the warmth and feeling in this poem. Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

Trust Issues

FREE WRITING

Keep up the great work!

over 1 year

Familiar Faces

FREE WRITING

Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

Social Anxiety

FREE WRITING

The way you captured a specific moment, a specific feelings, and be able to expand on that feeling and convey it creatively is a true art. You write with such eloquence and you have a very sophisticated way of conveying your point. Keep up the great work!

over 1 year

Colors

FREE WRITING

You've got some really creative ideas, and I can tell you'll be an inspiration to many people in the future. Keep up the great writing!

over 1 year

#believe

FREE WRITING

Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

Drowning-#balloons

FREE WRITING

Great paradoxical phrasing (drowing and balloons) Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

Anxiety

PROMPT: Emotion without Feeling

Love the choice of the feeling of anxiety, considering most people went for the basics. Example: love, hate, anger. So well done. Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

Sensing Emotion

PROMPT: Emotion without Feeling

Keep up the good writing!

over 1 year

Snow

FREE WRITING

Glad someone appreciates the snow as much as I do. Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

Goodnight

PROMPT: Solitary Contentment

Your writing is very eloquent, and your vocabulary is very high level. You have a good writing potential. Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

Look Up.

PROMPT: State of Awe

Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

State of Awe

PROMPT: State of Awe

Overall, an adorable scene. Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

Locked Away(2.0)

PROMPT: State of Awe

I see great potential in your writing. Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

Lies

FREE WRITING

Very interesting topic to approach. Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

Joy.

PROMPT: In the House

Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

Stereotypes - A slam poem.

FREE WRITING

Overall, this is a really good piece. Thank you for expressing your emotions through this piece; it makes your writing even kore powerful.

over 1 year

Love Is

PROMPT: Paradoxical Phrasing

I love how you gave us readers an insight on your beliefs. This piece make us more familiar with you as a person, it makes us closer with God, and it makes us want to show more love. Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

mature now

FREE WRITING

Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

The Meaning of January

FREE WRITING

Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

Doubt

FREE WRITING

Very well done. Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

Summer's Kiss

FREE WRITING

I love romantic pieces. This one was just too cute! I love it! Keep up the good work.

over 1 year

#SFOW15 | Like Wine

FREE WRITING

Love the simile. 'Like wine.' It really shows the richness of the blood, and also adds to the colour of the blood. I can imagine a glass of red wine being tipped over, the liquid gushing out. That's the type of image that effects what is being related to a moment in the piece. We can see here how important similes are, and you used it perfectly. Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

REVELATION

PROMPT: On the Last Day of the World

You structured this piece beautifully; a very romantic piece. Keep up the good work.

over 1 year

into their hearts

PROMPT: Why I Write

Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

My Last Day

PROMPT: On the Last Day of the World

Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

The sea

PROMPT: Perseverance

Very shprt and simple piece, but all the more powerful. Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

Smile

PROMPT: On the Last Day of the World

Good job! Keep up the good work.

over 1 year

What's the Point?

FREE WRITING

Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

I Don't Know Who I Am

FREE WRITING

Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

On the last day

PROMPT: On the Last Day of the World

A very powerful piece! Keep up the good work.

over 1 year

Homesick

PROMPT: Postcard Fiction

The way you structured your writing is beautiful. Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

The Daydreamer

PROMPT: Personal Essay Competition: Making Change 2018

Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

How the Words Flow

PROMPT: Open Prompt

Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

All lives matter

PROMPT: Speech Writing Competition 2018

Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

Grades Degrade

PROMPT: Speech Writing Competition 2018

Welcome to Write the World! This piece is a perfect start to your Portfolio. Keep up the good work.

over 1 year

Future

PROMPT: 1 Photo, 10 Lines

Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

The Sense Called Love

PROMPT: Your World in Three Senses

You really put a twist at the end. I really wasn't expecting that. It made your piece of writing ever more powerful. Keep up the good work.

over 1 year

What Does the Earth Say?

PROMPT: "What Does The Earth Say?"

You have some really good ideas. Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

Plucked

PROMPT: Impermanence

Keep up the brilliant work!

almost 2 years

Earth

PROMPT: Impermanence

Very powerful piece. Keep up the good work!

almost 2 years

They Took to the Greens

PROMPT: Impermanence

Very good piece. Short simple, but covering such a relevant topic.

almost 2 years

What's Going On?

PROMPT: All in a Minute

Loved the way you turned the plot around. I was expecting heartbreak,but then you gave me some hope and love. Well done!

almost 2 years

Angel

PROMPT: All in a Minute

I haven't read something like this in a long time. Its a beautiful piece. And its also one of my favourites. Keep up your excellent work!

almost 2 years

The Coyote

PROMPT: All in a Minute

You're writing is very interesting and you have some good ideas. Keep up the good work!

almost 2 years

Fact

PROMPT: FACT

Very informative piece!

almost 2 years

Poetry

FREE WRITING

Short, simple, but beautiful!

almost 2 years

Soulmates

PROMPT: Song Lines

Very romantic piece. Your simple, short stanzas hold a lot of meaning. Keep up the good work!

almost 2 years

When It Gets Warmer

PROMPT: Environmental Writing Competition September 2018

almost 2 years

The Wilderness

PROMPT: Environmental Writing Competition September 2018

A powerful poem; infact, one of the strongest. Well done!

almost 2 years

Signs of A Mourner

FREE WRITING

almost 2 years

Valhalla

FREE WRITING

Altogether, I thought it was a really interesting piece of writing.

almost 2 years