janice

United States

Peer Reviews

Dragon Feathers

FREE WRITING

unknown

never ending

PROMPT: Poetry and Spoken Word Competition 2019

I relate to this poem so well. I said it above, but this is definitely one of the best pieces I've read here. Please keep writing :)

over 2 years

My Star

FREE WRITING

I like the tone of this piece and how the character's personality shapes how they see the world around them. It's a very unique take, and I love how you did it. Make sure to proof-read your piece a little more carefully to get all of those tiny details, but great job!

over 2 years

one step at a time

PROMPT: 0-9

I love how the story started out so serious and intriguing, and ended with a girl walking to school in the rain. The whole thing was very captivating and left me wanting more. I would proof-read the story a little closer to check up on some tine grammatical and spelling error, but other than that, great job!!

over 2 years

the taste of the night sky

PROMPT: Improbable Flavor

unknown

Burned#candleflame

FREE WRITING

unknown

Bubble gum

PROMPT: Comedy or Tragedy?

unknown

When It Rains...

FREE WRITING

unknown

Serendipity

FREE WRITING

unknown

I Trusted You

FREE WRITING

unknown

empty notebook pages

FREE WRITING

Great job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

glass walls

FREE WRITING

This is one of your reviews for placing in AminahMcBina's contest, I'm doing them for her. Great job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

Fallen

FREE WRITING

Great job, and keep writing!

over 2 years

if only you

FREE WRITING

This is one of your reviews for placing in AminahMcBina's contest, I'm doing them for her. Great job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

what snakes do

FREE WRITING

This is one of your reviews for placing in AminahMcBina's contest, I'm doing them for her. Great job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

prayer of a lost man

FREE WRITING

This is one of your reviews for placing in AminahMcBina's contest, I'm doing them for her. Great job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

with fire we are blind (#candleflame)

FREE WRITING

This is one of your reviews for placing in AminahMcBina's contest, I'm doing them for her. Great job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

The High-Five.

FREE WRITING

Great job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

Sayonara Man: Chapter One

FREE WRITING

Great job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

“Again” ICBY Short Story

FREE WRITING

Great job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

The Eldest Child

FREE WRITING

Great job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

July 18, 2020

FREE WRITING

Great job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

Unspoken

PROMPT: Novel Writing Competition 2018

unknown

Loss

FREE WRITING

Great job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

Trains

FREE WRITING

unknown

One More Light #constellation #SFOW1

FREE WRITING

Great job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

What Does Home Mean To You?

PROMPT: Poetry and Spoken Word Competition 2018

Great job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

A Mother's Joy

FREE WRITING

Great job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

In A Loop

FREE WRITING

unknown

#LifeLemonsPrompt

FREE WRITING

Great job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

Split Ends

PROMPT: Personal Narrative Competition 2018

Great job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

A Spirit And His Guitar

PROMPT: "The Sky in Your Mouth"

Great job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

El Azucar Los Condujo #Azucar

FREE WRITING

Great job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

Of Faeries and Fatigues

PROMPT: Postcard Fiction

Great job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

Eternal Commitment

FREE WRITING

Great job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

#paperbirdcontest UNFATHOMABLE

FREE WRITING

Great job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

What the Water Knows

PROMPT: Human, Water, Night

Great job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

Your Name Is

FREE WRITING

Great job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

#firstSWWPC 7 | Dream Catcher

FREE WRITING

Sorry that I didn't give much "advice," but this piece was already so good! Good job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

Potato Chip Debate

FREE WRITING

Great job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

Love is Overrated

FREE WRITING

The second paragraph was very insightful and well-written. Good job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

Stardust #anhacontest

FREE WRITING

I love how you ended this piece, and how you only give a little bit of information at a time. Good job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

Backpack Inventory

PROMPT: Inventory

I really love the creativity you used to interpret this prompt. Good job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

My Night Breeze

PROMPT: "Night Breeze"

I love your choice of describing words. Good job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

A Purpose

FREE WRITING

I really, really adore this piece. Heartbreak to hope is really hard to write, and you just nailed it. Good job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

"Let's play hide and seek"

FREE WRITING

I really, really loved the ending. This piece is almost perfect. Good job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

#LifeLemons

FREE WRITING

I love the second-person view and the drama that you incorporated into this. Good job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

how van gogh saw the world

FREE WRITING

i love the third paragraph in particular. good job, and keep writing!

about 3 years

15 word stories- #9

FREE WRITING

The beginning and end were very well done--kudos to you for succeeding in such a difficult part of a story to write. Good job, and keep writing!

about 3 years

Synthesia

FREE WRITING

From someone who actually has synesthesia, I can tell you that you know what you're talking about! I love the metaphors you put into this piece. Good job, and keep writing!!

about 3 years

Little Red's Return

PROMPT: The Drabble

I know I said this like twice, but the ending was absolutely perfect. The wolf's reaction, as well as Little Red's, were both so believable. Good job, and keep writing!!

about 3 years

The voice of a ghost girl- Chapter 1

FREE WRITING

The beginning and ending were both very well done. I like how they tie together, and don't explain everything. Good job, and keep writing!!

about 3 years

Define Poetry

PROMPT: "The Sky in Your Mouth"

I would make this slightly longer. Good job, and keep writing!

about 3 years

Cinderella (Modern Retold): Part one

FREE WRITING

I really love how you began this piece, and how quickly you turned it from so happy to heartbreaking. Ella's and her father's reactions were perfect. Good job, and keep writing!

almost 3 years

Closer to you

PROMPT: FACT

I really like the voice this is written in. I would work on word variation, but that's it. Good job and keep writing!!!

about 3 years

The Dawn of Kings (Chapter five)

FREE WRITING

unknown

The Dawn of Kings (Chapter four)

FREE WRITING

Good job with the Thranduil/Leela scene!

about 3 years

The Dawn of Kings (Chapter three)

FREE WRITING

The mood you created is spot on. Good job!

about 3 years

The Dawn of Kings (Chapter two)

FREE WRITING

Again, the cliffhanger at the end is good. Keep writing!

about 3 years

Flower

FREE WRITING

I really like the voice and mood of this. The ending really got to me, too. Good job, and keep writing!

about 3 years

The Dawn of Kings (Chapter one)

FREE WRITING

Try to vary your words a little more, and work on making your sentences less choppy, but overall good job!!!

about 3 years

love the one you're with

FREE WRITING

I really enjoyed this piece, as well as the other two. Good job, and keep writing!

about 3 years

Fiction Week Prompt 5- Empathy

FREE WRITING

The ending was perfect. The repetition of the line "empathy, empathy..." was also great. Good job, and keep writing!!

about 3 years

Relapse

FREE WRITING

The ending really got to me. Highs automatically make lows. Great piece, and keep writing!!!

about 3 years

Parts of Me on a Page

PROMPT: Open Prompt

This piece is really moving. There were several places where it made me stop and think :)

about 3 years

Granted

FREE WRITING

The ending was pretty good--I liked it a lot. How Caleb turned from being heartless to knowing love really got to me.

about 3 years

To Those in the Dark

FREE WRITING

This piece really helped me, thank you so much for sharing ;)

about 3 years

Hachiman the Protecter: Prolouge

FREE WRITING

I'd really like to know about the culture of the people who live in Agnesia, but I understand that you can't give too much away ;) Good job and keep writing!

about 3 years

Forgot What I Was Gonna Say

PROMPT: "The Sky in Your Mouth"

The last line really made me laugh, and I like the jokes you added at the end ;)

about 3 years

boy problems.

FREE WRITING

The voice of this is pretty nice

about 3 years

Me

FREE WRITING

I really like all how you go and say what you like, regardless of what others think.

about 3 years

Mood

FREE WRITING

I really like the impression this left me with.

about 3 years

Chapter 1

FREE WRITING

I like your word variations.

about 3 years

Stage 5: Acceptance

PROMPT: Living the Questions

I know that it's really annoying hearing this over and over, but I'm really sorry about your sister. I know from personal experience that when you're in pain, physical or emotional, you write better. Your writing is beautiful :)

about 3 years

Last walk

PROMPT: Inventory

Try to work on your grammar, but I really liked it!

about 3 years

On Sacha

FREE WRITING

I think this is very well written.

about 3 years

From Ashes

PROMPT: Personal Narrative Competition 2018

Keep up the good work!

about 3 years

I Have a Plan (LMAP)

FREE WRITING

Try to vary your words a little and don't use so many clichés.

about 3 years

A twist of the bible

FREE WRITING

I really like the tone of this, as well as the part where you said " This was a fight in which each side put down their blades to watch, enemies stood side by side as blood was shed."

about 3 years

Hope of Morning

FREE WRITING

I really like the overall mood and feel of the story.

about 3 years

You, in a way...

FREE WRITING

Amazing poem, and hope you keep up the good work! And yes, yes it is so.

about 3 years

The best way to travel

FREE WRITING

The story itself was good, but the grammar could use a bit of work. Perhaps you could get a friend to spellcheck it for you? Overall, I liked it!

about 3 years

This Is Me

PROMPT: Mad Libs

This character really reminds me of...me :)

about 3 years