Breanna Jury

New Zealand

Message from Writer

I'm an aspiring author/novelist that's trying to branch out more and improve my writing

Peer Reviews

The Gift of Life

PROMPT: Fantasy Writing Competition 2019

I'd maybe introduce Hawthorn and the cops a little earlier, because I think the beginning is a bit slow compared to the pace and exposition at the end.

about 1 year

The Offseason

PROMPT: Fantasy Writing Competition 2019

I really love the action at the end, could you add a bit more into the beginning? Maybe introduce the prince a bit earlier in the story?

about 1 year