I Write Occasionally

United States of America

Okay-ish writer and poet.

Peer Reviews

#escapril anxiety

FREE WRITING

Your grasp of imagery and language is truly impressive, and your metaphors are always astounding in both their creativity and execution. Keep up the good work.

7 months

Then and Now #anhacontest

FREE WRITING

Try to step away from capitalizing every single line- I know it's scary. This might help your work seem a little less rigid and screaming (unless that was intended, in which case: great job!). As another suggestion: play around a little bit with punctuation! While you should strive to be grammatically correct, there's a lot of rules regarding poetry punctuation that are fun to break. I absolutely love your grasp of metaphor and imagery- it's so lovely to read, and your work is just very magical. Nicely done!

about 1 year

​Silence

PROMPT: No Pause for Breath

Wonderful job!

over 1 year

khloris

FREE WRITING

I have no words to describe how much I adore this. This is stunning. Beautiful, fantastic, a true work of art. You should be very very very proud of this piece because it's absolutely amazing. I aspire to tell this kind of story in my own writing one day. Please, keep up the good work!

over 1 year

Back Then

FREE WRITING

Please remember to put commas in contractions- otherwise, your work looks very sloppy and careless. This is so lovely, and really meaningful. Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

it's a snowy day

PROMPT: Love After Love

Give me some of your talent! Anyway, this piece is one of my favorites from you. I love it very much. It's gorgeous and lyrical, whimsical, but not flighty. Great work. Drink some tea for me! -IWO

over 1 year

Alles Ist Zitronenschale

FREE WRITING

Is it supposed to be "mit kampf" or Mein Kampf? Because the two are very different things. Mit kampf means "with head" and I don't think that's what you're going for. Also, be sure to capitalize ALL your nouns when using German! I really like this piece, it's well written and thought out. Nice job!

over 1 year

I'm Afraid That You're My Everything

FREE WRITING

Wonderfully simple and gorgeous. Your grasp of repetition and symbolism is amazing. I usually don't enjoy things written in first person a ton (there are always exceptions), but your piece is a fantastic example of it done right. As a side note, your footnote, is also very poetic, and I think it actually contributes to the piece. Perhaps you could find a way to incorporate it? Please, continue with writing poetry- I'm excited to see more of your work!

almost 2 years