I enjoyed the simplicity of the piece. However, I don't think that adding some more details (in moderation) will take away from the gentle simplicity of the story. Please keep adding to this piece! Also, thank you for having shared...

Your piece was an interesting read. I can sympathize with the person who is under such 'embarrassment.' The main thing I want to warn you against is to leave your piece without any punctuation. Adding some into your piece will...

You did well in immediately throwing the reader into the thick of the action. However, I think that it would be nice if you included some punctuation in your piece. Though it might be a show of creative liberty to...

I liked your word choice and imagery; however, I would recommend that you add some punctuation and correct some of your spelling errors. It would be disappointing if someone missed out on reading your piece because of mistakes in language...

The emotion is very vivid in this piece. You were able to convey it well with your use of imagery. As the reader, a little piece of me hopes that if there is any truth to this piece, that the...

The way the "quite" classroom shattered with ring of the bell was the best part. With all of your descriptions, the forced silence of the room was building up until it exploded when everyone shot out of the room. The...

This piece was a delight to read. I could hear your mystified tone as you talked about the unknown draw of the wild. Thank you for such a beautiful piece.

I enjoyed reading this piece because of how it brought nature to life. I could mentally picture the life of the river and could feel the glow of the sun. Most of my comments are in the highlighted section. You...

When do you find yourself daydreaming the most? Do you daydream because of present boredom or because your mind is ever active? For some reason, I feel that your eyes are closed in this piece. Your words make me feel...