There is so much to like about this piece. The star and space images, the diction, the syntax––you've done an amazing job with this!
I read your comment about the three characters present before I got into this review, which made the perspective clear (though I'm not sure whether that would have been a problem otherwise). This is an excellent piece and I hope that someday I'll get the chance to learn more about the story. :) The last line is absolutely amazing. Wonderful job with this!
PROMPT: Everyday Magic
This is really cool. It's short but thoughtful and deep, and the more I look the more I see in it. You've done an excellent job. Keep writing!
about 1 year
Following your train of thoughts is so fascinating. The way you wrote it is so natural and simple that it drew me along and was fun to read. Excellently done!
about 2 years
This is a beautiful poem! My only suggestion would be to check punctuation, since a couple of the periods seemed like they were out of place. Other than that, you did an excellent job!
over 2 years