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Jacob Barrett

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Jacob Barrett (New Zealand) reviewed:

Today is the Day

PROMPT: Setting as Mood

Cool piece, please continue it! Tell us what happens next! I can't wait to read more.
Thanks,
Jacob

about 2 months ago

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Jacob Barrett (New Zealand) reviewed:

Concrete Dream

PROMPT: WILD

Really awesome piece, I enjoyed it :) Keep writing, and I look forward to reading more of your stuff!
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Jacob

about 2 months ago

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Jacob Barrett (New Zealand) reviewed:

Be Yourself They Say.

PROMPT: Numerous Narrators

There are a few little errors (I've highlighted them), but otherwise this is a really cool piece of writing. I hope my advice was useful, and I look forward to reading more of your writing :)
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Jacob

about 2 months ago

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Jacob Barrett (New Zealand) reviewed:

Wrinkles

FREE WRITING

Cool poem, I enjoyed reading it :) Hope you found my advice somewhat useful, and I look forward to reading more of your work.
Thanks,
Jacob

about 2 months ago

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Jacob Barrett (New Zealand) reviewed:

Music of the River

PROMPT: WILD

Considering the length of your poem, you should go back through and read it aloud to catch any errors you may have put in. For example, in that final section "The SMOOTH/indescribable sound of water is SMOOTH/Strong/Fierce/It is akin only...

about 2 months ago

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Jacob Barrett (New Zealand) reviewed:

Peace

FREE WRITING

Cool piece, I like it :) Hope to read more of your work, and I hope some of my advice is helpful (check the highlighted areas in the poem).
Merry Christmas from NZ,
Jacob

about 2 months ago

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Jacob Barrett (New Zealand) reviewed:

Ephemera

PROMPT: WILD

A really cool poem, which tons of room to get even better. I hope to read more of your work in the future, and I hope that my advice has been helpful :)
Merry Christmas from NZ,
Jacob

about 2 months ago

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Jacob Barrett (New Zealand) reviewed:

Jane

PROMPT: Open Prompt

Despite the very few issues, this is a good piece that has tons of potential. I look forward to seeing what you can do with it, and reading more of your writing in the future :) Merry Christmas from NZ,...

about 2 months ago

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Jacob Barrett (New Zealand) reviewed:

FERAL

PROMPT: WILD

There are a few grammatical issues (I've highlighted them), but otherwise a really good poem. Keep writing, I look forward to reading more of your work.
Merry Christmas from NZ,
Jacob

about 2 months ago

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Jacob Barrett (New Zealand) reviewed:

To Be Wild

PROMPT: WILD

Cool poem, I really liked it :) I look forward to reading more of your writing.
Thanks,
Jacob

about 2 months ago

Published Work

Remember

Verse
There's a forgotten song I used to sing
Can't help remembering how it goes
Kinda reminds me of a friend
Who never said goodbye

Chorus
Oh, the melody's stuck in my head
But the words are lost in my mind

Bridge
If I could just remember, remember....
If I could just remember, remember....

Verse
Every note's another colour I can see
But it's blurry like the portrait of a ghost
And I still hear the whispers in my dreams
Then the darkness recedes and leaves nothing at all

Chorus
Oh, the melody's stuck in my head
But the words are lost in my mind

Bridge
If I could just remember, remember....
If I could just remember, remember....
If I could just remember, remember
If I could just remember, remember

The wind is howling in my head
Rustling all the leaves once more....

Outro
And I still can't remember, remember
And I still can't remember, remember
If I could just...

Remember

There's a forgotten song I used to sing
Can't help remembering how it goes
Kinda reminds me of a friend
Who never said goodbye

Oh, the melody's stuck in my head
But the words are lost in my mind

If I could just remember, remember....
If I could just remember, remember....

Every note's another colour I can see
But it's blurry like the portrait of a ghost
And I still hear the whispers in my dreams
Then the darkness recedes and leaves nothing at all

Oh, the melody's stuck in my head
But the words are lost in my mind

If I could just remember, remember....
If I could just remember, remember....
If I could just remember, remember
If I could just remember, remember

The wind is howling in my head
Rustling all the leaves once more....

And I still can't remember, remember
And I still can't remember, remember
If I could just remember, remember
​If I could just remember,...

Remember

There's a forgotten song I used to sing
I can't help remembering the way it sounds
Like a friend
A friend that never said goodbye

It's been playing in my head since fifteen
The melody seems to ring with nostalgia 
But the words
The words escape my mind

And I still wonder, if it will go away
Because no matter how I try, I keep singing it wrong

Every note paints the picture more clearly
They're like the colors of a memory that just
Seems to glow
To glow like moonlight

It echoes like a whisper in my dreams
And when the darkness recedes I try to face it
But I'm trapped
I'm trapped in the sunshine

And I still wonder, if it will go away
Because no matter how I try, I keep singing it wrong
And it haunts me, with laughter and smiles
A friendly face that I chase, but it's gone

There's something reassuring about the breeze ...

A More Hopeful Song

VERSE:
You can say people are vicious and cruel
That it's our nature to hurt one another
In spite of every evil thing we do
I know our nature's to nurture each other

PRECHORUS:
Still we build walls
Dividing us all
Watching the gap growing larger

CHORUS:
People say that nothing will ever change
But I disagree
People say one song won't change a thing
Why can't they see
If we all sing a more hopeful song
We might just get along

VERSE:
You can say people are mean and small
We disgust and distrust each other
But they could build ten thousand walls
And we'd still fight to help one another

PRECHORUS + CHORUS

OUTRO:
I know people can't change in a day
But I know we deserve
A chance to save our world
This sort of change can make people afriad
But who knows, we might just get along
If we sing a more hopeful song

 

Songwriting Competition 2017

The Time Is Now

Soundcloud Link For Recording Of The Song:
https://soundcloud.com/jacob-barrett-712016173/the-time-is-now

Verse 1:
I see a world through this one screen
Immersed beyond obsession
It doesn’t mean a thing
Drifting away as I float down stream
The water is murky
Feels like a dream

Verse 2:
There’s a sandstorm swirling on outside
But we’re safe in this house
There’s no need to hide
Cries on the wind that no one hears
Blown away and forgotten
Because no one seems to care

Pre Chorus:
What a world we’ve made
We need to fix it before it’s too late
Because we’re falling apart right now

Chorus:
When we can;t stand tall
Face up to it all
Bent and broken we fall
Crushed beneath the pain
It’s time for a change
Things can’t stay this way
Tomorrows a new day
And the time is now

Verse 3:
Strange painting lie upon the walls
Some leak bright colour
Others with none at all
If you glow brightly...

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