Peppermint Lemonade

United States of America

"I still fall on my face sometimes and I
Can't color inside the lines 'cause
I'm perfectly incomplete
I'm still working on my masterpiece and I
I wanna hang with the greatest gotta
Way to go, but it's worth the wait"

Peer Reviews

Days when we were pure

FREE WRITING

Keep up the good work! :)

over 1 year

I'm just tierd

FREE WRITING

You might want to correct the title since it is misspelled, otherwise I see no other grammar or spelling mistakes! Keep up the nice work! I'd like to read more of your writing. :)

over 1 year

The War

PROMPT: 25 Words

War is such broad topic with many opinions and experiences, being as every country has been involved in a war at one time or another and this piece is probably hitting home for a lot of people in the world right now. You did a good job at using the power of suggestion, being as without the title, this piece could be about a lot of other things. Though you never clearly stated the character's feelings, you hinted at them in an unstressed way, which gives the reader some thinking to do on their own. Keep up the good work.

over 1 year

Heroes and Villains

PROMPT: Child Narrator

I saw a couple punctuation mistakes, you might want to give the piece a quick look over for that, but otherwise: great job! I love it! Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

The Dragon

PROMPT: No Pause for Breath

This was a fun quick read! thank you and keep up the good work!

over 1 year

Honey bees

PROMPT: 25 Words

Nice job! Keep up the good work! :)

over 1 year

bathtub

PROMPT: No Pause for Breath

I really like how you made your lines so abstract and used a lot of parallels in the piece to lay out a certain feel for it. Nice job! :)

over 1 year

Moment by Moment

FREE WRITING

You've written a very well structured piece that I think a lot of people can relate to. I enjoyed reading this and thinking about it from a personal perspective. Keep up the good work! :)

over 1 year

I am not Deaf

FREE WRITING

Wonderful job at laying out the story and explaining all the feelings surrounding it. You really managed to bring the narrator's voice out in an amazing way and showed the depth of their personality and reasonings behind their actions. Keep up the good work. :)

over 1 year

Just Is

PROMPT: Music Is

This is really complex piece, I enjoyed it. Looking forward to reading more of your work. :)

over 1 year

She

PROMPT: Walking

First of all, congratulations on a wonderful piece! You did a very good job writing it, especially considering English is not your native language. I noticed a few, but not many, grammar mistakes and misspellings, so I highlighted them for you. Hopefully that will help some! Keep up the good work, I can't wait to read more of your work! As time progresses your English will continue to get better with every piece you write. :)

over 1 year

My Home

FREE WRITING

Beautiful, in-depth descriptions! You did well at bringing out the texture of everything you were detailing and that really makes a huge difference to the reader's imaginative response to reading it. Might want to check up on some punctuation, otherwise: good job! :)

over 1 year

The Yellow Tape

PROMPT: Poetry and Spoken Word Competition 2018

over 1 year

It’s Time

PROMPT: 25 Words

Nice dialogue and good use of 25 words! Keep up the good work! :)

over 1 year

Catching

PROMPT: 25 Words

Looking forward to reading more of your work! great job! :)

over 1 year

Understanding Silence

PROMPT: Poetry and Spoken Word Competition 2018

Keep up the good work! :)

over 1 year

Insane

PROMPT: Place Poem

Though this piece was rather short, it delivered a good amount of details that build up a structure to the place being described. I look forward to reading more of your work!

over 1 year

bethany beach.

PROMPT: Place Poem

This was a really enjoyable poem, it brought me back to the days I went to the beach as a child. The imagery and detail you put into it is great and really transports the reader to the place being described. Good job! :)

over 1 year

Greatest Evenings

PROMPT: Place Poem

This is a lovely piece! A lot of really nice imagery and the theme is so pretty! Simple, but sweet with a hint of nostalgia. Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

My World, My Soul, My Life

FREE WRITING

You did a terrific job at structuring the piece, so it covers all the bases and explains the viewpoint of the writer thoroughly, yet not clumsily nor overdone. It's simple and to the point. The theme of how your life may not always be the best, but it's your life and that's something important to remember was great and I think that's what I really took away from it. Nice work!

over 1 year

A Crack

PROMPT: Fissure

A lot of cool viewpoints about cracks that I wouldn't ordinarily have thought of! Good job!

over 1 year

The new song

FREE WRITING

Your piece has such lovely imagery and each line seems to beat like the ebbs of the waves being described. The only thing I noticed that you might want to check up on is the tense seems to change quite oddly. Up to you on whether or not you want to change it though, maybe it was intended to be that way. :) Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

Let You Down

FREE WRITING

I would honestly give you a standing ovation for this if I could. It's flat out beautiful and has such a crispy feel to it. Keep up the good work.

over 1 year

No One Should

FREE WRITING

This piece was quite eye opening and astonishing to me, because I really didn't expect to be like this. You did well at portraying how you were feeling and relaying that feeling to the reader. Your choice of vocabulary was very good and enhanced the piece even more. The last paragraph really hit me hard, there was a lot of pain in it. I'm very impressed with this piece of writing, though quite saddened by the theme, but I suppose that was the point of it.

over 1 year

Mysterious Sky

PROMPT: The Unknown

I really liked this piece, a lot of nice imagery with some new viewpoints of something I see all the time. Thank you for writing this poem, I need to read more of your work! :)

over 1 year

Home

PROMPT: Zoom In

I really enjoyed reading this piece, it brought back so much for me. If I would give you any recommendation... it would be to make it longer, because I'd love to feel that feeling of home longer, it was really a great experience for me. :) You did terrific work at making the piece enjoyable and beautiful.

over 1 year

Our Duty to Our Law Enforcement

PROMPT: Op-Ed Competition 2018

Great, great job! I completely agree with your argument on this, police officers risk their lives and health, they go through stressful, terrifying situations, see horrible things, deal with awful people, and yet they get some of the least gratitude that any job receives, in fact they're often portrayed as bad people when most of them are just trying to get through one day at a time and trying to make the world a better place by offering people needed protection. Thank you so much for writing this! Keep up the good work and have a nice day!

over 1 year

Strange Sensation

FREE WRITING

This is a really lovely poem, it's structured nicely and provokes a lot of feelings in the reader. Good job!

over 1 year

I Am

FREE WRITING

I thoroughly enjoyed this piece, to me it kind of feels like you've written your aesthetic. Keep up the good work! :)

over 1 year

A Philosophical Acrostic

PROMPT: Acrostic Verse

You made the best acrostic poem I've ever seen, not only was it thought-provoking, but also quite humorous and if you analyze it further, it's almost a parallel for how something really simple (the potato) and the most thought of and analyzed complicated things (the philosophy of the actual poem) are often one and the same, how if we don't look at the big picture we often miss out on the most obvious things. Good job!

over 1 year

Your Hands

FREE WRITING

In the message to reader you said you would like this to be more of a poem than prose. A few things that might help is trying to make a rhyming story, a lot of poetry has to do with rhythm and rhyme, so try seeing if you can find synonyms to the words you used that rhyme with each other. Poetry is also different in structure to prose, poetry has generally shorter sentences and is divided into paragraphs (or stanzas) with equal amounts of sentences. You could start by dividing what you've already written, by ideas is usually how it's done, and then work on each line individually by molding it into poetical sounding stanzas. I hope that helps! Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

When the Sun Fell From the Sky (rosiejonz@gmail.com)

FREE WRITING

I love how you took a title and turned it into a lovely poem. You did a superb job, my only reccomendation would be making it flow better, because I didn't really feel a rythm as I read it, it wasn't particularly smooth in my head. Just some advice, otherwise: great job! I really enjoy your pieces!

over 1 year

I Know Love

PROMPT: Love After Love

I can't put into words how much I relate to this piece and like it, this is exactly what I would love my home to be like. A place of peace and happiness, a place where people can be themselves, where the darkness isn't let in. Good job at capturing your hopes for the future and giving yoru readers a glimpse of your dreams. The structure of the piece is great as well. Keep up the good work!

over 1 year

You Think... but I Know

FREE WRITING

Great job, thank you so so much for writing this, you might have just helped someone get through a bad day or feel important! Keep up the good work! :)

over 1 year

Still Here

PROMPT: Friendship Tweet

This is terrific, you really got down to the soul of what good friendship is about and looked at it in another way than most would. Can't wait to read more of your work! :)

over 1 year

Green - Love in 13 Words

PROMPT: Love in 13 Words

One thing I would recommend is switching the order of the words around. I feel like you meant the girl was sitting on the bench watching the boy, but the way it's phrased it sounds like the boy is from the bench, or even yet the eyes are from the bench. Just a grammar recommendation for clarity. Otherwise, great job! Loved it! :)

over 1 year

If All My Characters Were In One Room, Based Off a Prompt

FREE WRITING

This was such a neat idea and you took to it quite well, your characters seem really interesting. There were a couple places where I noticed the order of words was grammatically incorrect that I outlined for you. Really like the quotes in your "Message to reader" by the way.

over 1 year

Albania

PROMPT: Ten Words to You

I can really relate to this piece as a Romanian. Our ancestors worked so hard to try to make their country a better place and now all the teenagers want to leave and come to America and live a "grand life" usually not realizing that it takes hard work here too. Being half American I see things from two perspectives, and most of my friends back home don't appreciate the beauty of where they live, they constantly wish to come to America, the land of gold, instead of trying to stay and make their home better. Thank you for writing this! Keep up the good work! :)

over 1 year

Hufflepuffs

FREE WRITING

I have actually never read any of the Harry Potter books or seen the movies, but I do know the basics about the series, I read some of my friend's fanfiction on it, and I know my house is Slytherin. I really enjoyed this piece and it drew me in despite being, like a I said, not a die-hard Harry Potter fan. Can't wait to read more of your work!! :)

over 1 year

friendship

PROMPT: Friendship Tweet

I really liked this piece and I would love to see an expanded version, maybe outside the prompt since that character limit will keep you from describing it in fullness. I like the angle you're looking at friendship from and you looked at two different ways people see friendship and then closed with your own opinion of it. Keep up the good work! :)

over 1 year

​What is Friendship?

PROMPT: Friendship Tweet

I love this piece, you did an amazing job at getting to the root of what friendship actually is. I hope you have a great day! :)

over 1 year

A Ritual

FREE WRITING

Even though I'm not a huge fan of horror, I still enjoyed this piece a lot because there's a moral and a deeper story behind it. I like how it's narrated by the creature, it gives it an interesting perspective. At first I thought it was going to be okay, Bethany would be fine, Kyle would walk away happy because his friend would be happy, but it took a drastic turn. I like how you used a lot of satire in this piece. It was a creative and thought provoking piece. Keep up the good work! :)

over 1 year

There's Nothing Wrong With Us

FREE WRITING

The fact that you didn't over-saturate the poem with facts about where the inspiration for it came from or what the backstory is about really makes it more relatable to the reader and also makes it mysterious, kind of makes me wonder. I love how it bounces between more thoughtful lines and more lighthearted tones. The only advice I would give is adding punctuation and capitals, but you might have left them off intentionally. Otherwise, great job! Keep up the good work!

almost 2 years

In January

PROMPT: “In January”

I really enjoyed this piece, it was direct and to the point. The only advice I would give is maybe making it a bit longer, letting the story unfold more. I honestly find that the last line is an interesting ending though. It's unexpected and blunt, and brings a nice end to the poem, leaving the reader to their own thoughts about what they've just read. Good job! :)

almost 2 years

A Little Girl From a Village

PROMPT: Chunyun

First of all, I absolutely love this piece, from every aspect. From the deep emotion behind writing it, to the tiny details you added that really made it, it is amazing. It's really a great first hand experience to have and you wrote it in such a relaxed way, it was really enjoyable to read. I can't wait to read more of your writing on Write the World. :)

almost 2 years

Quirky

PROMPT: WILD

One thing I would personally recommend is adding punctuation, just for the sake of grammar. Maybe periods at the ends of stanzas and commas to separate sentences within the stanzas, that way you can still keep the flow and have it grammatically correct, but those are just suggestions. This piece has a lot of great tempo, I didn't even have to read it out loud to get the beat of the rhymes. Good job! Can't wait to read more of your work!

almost 2 years

Love

FREE WRITING

I really enjoy the way you write, because it's very poetical. Even though it has a story and is written in story-form, the words seem to just glide off the tongue and word choices are simply delicious. The way you write is almost like eating words and I think that's the part I like best. Keep up the good work! :) (also the 'message to reader' is unexpectedly funny, in a good way)

over 2 years

My Safe Place

PROMPT: Music Is

I love this, it's a really lovely description of music and how you feel about it. I totally agree, it's like a safe little cave I can recover in whenever I feel down. :)

over 2 years

The Word Called Feeling

FREE WRITING

Keep writing and go on to great things!

over 2 years

If I Were

FREE WRITING

Good job! This piece was wonderful to read and agree with everything on the list. I love how you incorporated things that apply to everyone's everyday lives in the piece, that way more people can relate. Keep up the good work! :)

over 2 years

Courage

PROMPT: Flash Fiction Competition 2017

Keep up the good work and good luck! :)

over 2 years

Inevitable

FREE WRITING

This is a lovely piece! keep up the good work! :)

over 2 years

Epilogue to Hotel California by the Eagles

PROMPT: Lyrics Unsung

I was so excited when I found this piece and really happy that you like the Eagles too! For this prompt I picked Desperado as my song, so this is a really cool coincidence! :) Keep up the good work!

over 2 years

Promise Me

FREE WRITING

This is a really lovely piece, the way you describe their lives is fantastic, it's almost like a whole love story condensed to poem form. :) Keep up the good work! I hope your move goes well.

over 2 years

Running Out of Time

FREE WRITING

This was a beautiful piece and I was really surprised on how similar it was to the way I think of life. Keep up the good work! :)

over 2 years

Tips??

FREE WRITING

Well, one suggestion I can offer is taking a break for awhile. That sometimes helps with me, the only thing you have to be careful for is you don't get discouraged with your story during the break. That happened to me with one of my books and I still haven't finished it three years later. If you're writing a thick plotted story and you don't know how to continue it, try reviewing your characters, think of putting yourself in their places. Or better yet, put yourself in the readers' place. What are your expectations for the story, what would make the greatest plot continuation, or even a different angle, what would you not expect? What would come as a complete surprise to you as a reader? Also, look through your favorite books and movies for inspiration. For instance, what did you like in that particular plot and how can you make your story have the same affect on its readers? That's pretty much the only advice I can give. Most of the times with my stories, I just take a small break, maybe about a week long, and then I force myself to sit down and write. That usually snaps me out of the writers' block. Hope this helps! :)

over 2 years

Questionable Love

FREE WRITING

I really enjoyed this piece. While reading it I wasn't sure where it was going, what was going to happen at the end, as I neared the ending, I feared it was going to end in heartbreak, but once I finished it was really happy because the ending was truly beautiful. You did a terrific job! Keep up the good work! :)

over 2 years

My Story

FREE WRITING

This was a great read! It was really nicely written. I loved the vocabulary you used (not unintelligible, but not boring or repetitive). The plot line was very direct, offering a very punchy and action filled diegesis, with no confusing places or weird forks in the road. Keep up the good work! :)

over 2 years

Cairo

PROMPT: Living Locales

You did a terrific job at describing the city of Cairo. I've always wanted to go there, and this piece made me want to just hop on a plane and go. :)

over 2 years

Universal Questions

FREE WRITING

Thumbs up! :)

over 2 years

10 Cool Things About Me

FREE WRITING

This is such a cool idea! I think I'm going to try to do one like this too. 10 Things are always so fun to write! :)

over 2 years

My Fear

FREE WRITING

This is a great piece! I swear I was so astonished when I read this, I thought I was the only one who felt this way! Most people I know say they hate their parents instead of love them and respect them for all the love they've given them, which I find incredibly sad. Thank you so much for writing this! You captured the feelings of love perfectly. :)

over 2 years

The Dance

PROMPT: Lyrics Unsung

I listened to the song and it's really become one of my favorites. It's so sweet and sad. Garth Brooks kind of reminds me of Alan Jackson. Good job! this is a wonderful interpretation! :)

over 2 years

The Meadow

FREE WRITING

Thank you so much for writing this! It's so lovely. Keep up the good work! :)

over 2 years

Daddy's Girl

PROMPT: Cast of Characters

This is great! If you ever come out with the story behind the characters, I would love to read it! Keep up the good work! :)

over 2 years

Sometimes you miss the memories

FREE WRITING

Thank you so much for writing this! I was actually planning to write a piece like this when I saw yours and I was like: wow, this sounds a lot like what happened to me. I'm sorry you had to go through this. Remember to stay strong! Ana :)

over 2 years

A Dream

FREE WRITING

This is really pretty! I always love your pieces and every time I see you've written something I get excited because I know it's going to be good. Keep up the good work! :) -- Ana

over 2 years

Caught

PROMPT: WILD

This piece is really good! It reminds me of "The Most Dangerous Game". I look forward to reading more of your work! :)

over 2 years

1 minute can change you.

FREE WRITING

This is a really touching piece. Like I said, it brought me to tears. You did a really good job at portraying the fear and confusion and atmosphere while waiting to find out what was happening. The way you started the piece was also incredible, remembering the simple things that happened right before the terrorist attack really added to the piece. It made me feel as though I was actually there experiencing what the main character was. Thank you for writing this, it really gave me different perspective of how Swedish people were feeling about during this. Hearing a first hand account of what happens from someone who actually lives in the country is so different to reading the news.

over 2 years

A World of Beauty

PROMPT: Poetry and Spoken Word Competition 2017

Every line is a real treat to read, almost like eating ice cream. You did a terrific job! Good luck at the competition and keep writing! :) Ana

over 2 years

Hidden Belongings

PROMPT: Poetry and Spoken Word Competition 2017

Keep writing! :)

over 2 years

Grace

FREE WRITING

Grace is my middle name so I was really intrigued when I saw the title. :) Keep up the good work! I'm looking forward to reading this piece when it's finished.

over 2 years

My Top 10 Artist and Why I Like Them

FREE WRITING

I'm so happy you wrote this! I haven't heard too many of these artists, I'll try to check them out soon. Are there any songs you'd specifically recommend by them?

over 2 years

I Want Love

FREE WRITING

Thumbs up! :)

over 2 years

Some Days

FREE WRITING

Good job! I'm glad you wrote this. Keep up the good work! :)

over 2 years

The Same Way

FREE WRITING

Great job! This is beautiful! :)

over 2 years

Race

PROMPT: Poetry and Spoken Word Competition 2017

Good luck at the competition! You did great on this piece!

over 2 years

Beautiful Day?

PROMPT: Poetry and Spoken Word Competition 2017

over 2 years

A Student's Resolve

PROMPT: 26 Sentences

Something about this piece that drew me in, was the title. It wasn't at all like any of the other pieces published on this prompt, it was refreshing and new. Another reason I liked this piece was because it hit close to home. Up until 4th grade, I wasn't at all ambitious with my studying, but one day I decided that I wanted to make something of myself, so I started to study a lot more. Now I get a lot better grades.

over 2 years

This Year

FREE WRITING

Good job! This piece almost made me cry. It's really pretty and sweet.

over 2 years

forgive me

PROMPT: Synchronized Sounds

This is a really sweet piece, it reminds me of my grandmother. You did a really good writing it, it's very pretty. Keep up the good work!

over 2 years

Race Track

FREE WRITING

This is a pretty piece. I really love this time of morning, it's really special. You're right, it never gets old. :)

over 2 years

Maluhia Loaa Ma Ano

PROMPT: The Peace of Wild Things

This piece was just indescribably beautiful in so many ways. Really one of the best pieces I've ever read. Good job! :)

over 2 years

Wasn't born with an American Dream

FREE WRITING

This is an amazing poem and I can really relate to it. Everything you said was so true, and especially love the ending. So many people I know, expect the world to be given to them on a golden platter, but I feel that working hard for what you have, is what makes it yours. Thank you for writing this! Keep up the good work!

over 2 years

My Top 10 Opinions About the World I Live In

PROMPT: Your View

You pointed out some really great points in this piece. I'm sorry I made the review so long though, hopefully I didn't bore you to death. ;)

over 2 years

Gone from the world

FREE WRITING

This is a really touching piece, I'm glad you wrote it. Maybe if more people realized the pain fighting causes, they wouldn't be so quick to start wars.

over 2 years

We've Lost Treasure Island

PROMPT: Invented Cartography

I love the way you wrote this! The writing is actually textured, it made me feel as though I were actually holding the map, ready to start an adventure! Good job! :)

over 2 years

The Song of Troy

FREE WRITING

I like how you wrote the whole story in poetical form. The choice of words are really pretty and it makes the poem flow well. This is a really nice dedication to Troy.

over 2 years

Solitude

PROMPT: Countdown

Keep up the good work!

over 2 years

People-Watching

FREE WRITING

It is really cool how much I can learn about people by just watching them. Sometimes I'll just zone out and watch other people. To me it's really neat, because it takes my mind off my problems and helps me learn more about myself through other people. Thanks for writing this! :)

over 2 years

Iliad

PROMPT: Creature View

This is such a beautiful piece! I love the detail you put into it, and how you and Iliad communicate. It's really sweet. :)

over 2 years

Amnesia

FREE WRITING

I really like how only the 2nd and 4th lines rhyme. It makes the piece more interesting. The way you describe amnesia gave me a new view of it. I really like this piece! Good job! :)

over 2 years

Worth it

FREE WRITING

This piece is so beautiful! I teared up reading it. It must have taken so much time and patience to write all of it in rhymes. Good job! :) Keep up the good work!

over 2 years

Just An Illusion... I think...

PROMPT: I Remember

This is a super piece, I really felt the emotion in it. Good job!

over 2 years

Defeated by a Chair

FREE WRITING

I read this before lunch, and I could barely stop laughing long enough to take a bite. ;) Good job! This piece is great! :)

over 2 years

The End

FREE WRITING

This is a beautiful piece, I like it so much. It really remind of my life in someways, wondering if I'm remembered by anyone. You did a really good job. :)

over 2 years

Drawing Out From Deep Recesses

PROMPT: I Remember

This is a terrific piece! It's not headache-causing-philosophical, but it's not silly either. Good job! :)

over 2 years

Hope

PROMPT: Emotion by Association

This is a good piece, it made my day. :)

over 2 years

Unanswered

PROMPT: Mysteries Abound

Good piece, a lot of good philosophical questions that really got me to thinking. :)

over 2 years

I Remember

PROMPT: I Remember

This piece is so reflective on how much people in the military sacrifice for their country, and, of course, us. I wish more people would think of it that way.

over 2 years

Good bye

FREE WRITING

This piece is so sad and touching, I almost cried reading it. I can't imagine what losing my parents would be like. You did a really good job at writing this, the detail that went into it is amazing and really added more depth to the pain and innocence of the child.

over 2 years

Map

FREE WRITING

I loved reading this piece! :)

over 2 years

Stars

FREE WRITING

This is such a pretty piece! Good job! :)

over 2 years

Secrets of the Universe

PROMPT: Beyond Reason

I love every single question in this piece. The way you wrote it is so poetical and smooth, it brings back memories and makes me happy. I really enjoyed reading it! :) Good job!

over 2 years

I Can Still Remember

PROMPT: I Remember

This piece is really sad and pretty. You did a good job writing it. :)

over 2 years

nothing on my mind

FREE WRITING

This is a piece I think a lot of writers can relate to. It's subtly funny, cute, and a little ironic. Good job! :)

over 2 years

PROMPT: TIME OF MY LIFE

PROMPT: Writing Synapses

This is a really cool prompt idea! :)

over 2 years

I Forget... I Am Sorry

PROMPT: I Remember

This is a really beautiful piece. I almost cried reading it. You are a great writer, keep up the good work. :)

over 2 years

Passion: Mythical Creature or Human Trait

PROMPT: WILD

Good job! :)

over 2 years

Sparrow

PROMPT: Creature View

This is such a sweet piece. It's lighthearted sometimes and sad others, and that ability to bounce back and forth is really cool and interesting. It's also really detailed which brings out the relief, and made me feel, not just as a reader, but as a bystander might, observing everything and formulating my own opinions. I've always loved sparrows, so this piece was really fun for me to read. Good job! :)

over 2 years

& your hand was holding mine

PROMPT: I Remember

This is such a beautiful piece! I really like it. :) Good job!

over 2 years

Dream

FREE WRITING

Dreamland is so nice sometimes. :)

over 2 years

opinions

PROMPT: Your View

Great list! :)

over 2 years

Phones During School Are a Bad Idea

PROMPT: Op-Ed Competition 2017

This is a superb piece! Again, I'm really glad you choose this topic. It's something that I feel is very under-discussed in modern world and something that needs to be dealt with accordingly. I don't think phones are bad when used as resources (after all, it's an amazing thing to have the world's information in your back pocket), but they're just being overused and are really overrated when it comes to social media. It's really annoying when I'm trying to study and people are showing their friends videos on their phones, it's unnecessary and distracting. School is for learning not texting. I added a few comments to places that had some mistakes. Hope that helps! Thanks again for writing such a wonderful essay! Keep up the good work! :)

over 2 years

I Know

PROMPT: Flash Fiction Competition 2016

For a piece so short, this is terrific. Good job! If you ever write a sequel let me know, I'd love to know what happens next. :)

over 2 years

Mommy

FREE WRITING

You must love your mom very much, I'm so glad you do. It's so wonderful to have this special relationship with your mother, most people don't. I'm very lucky I do. :) Good job!

over 2 years

Love

FREE WRITING

This piece is so pretty, and reminds me that I'm not alone. I'm so happy that you included the Holy Trinity. :)

over 2 years

Blind

FREE WRITING

I like the way you represented this topic. It's not too long or too short, it's straight to the point and inspiring. Good job! :)

over 2 years

Remembering Remembering

PROMPT: I Remember

This is such a pretty piece, it shows that you put a lot of time, patience, and soul into it. This is one of the best pieces I've read ever, not just on Write the World. I'm really impressed, good job! :)

over 2 years

I forgot

PROMPT: I Remember

This piece so shockingly eye opening. It's beautiful in such a sad way. Really makes me think. Also the way it switches in the middle, from being mainly carefree to sad. It's like when something unexpected and bad happens, how life seems to completely flip. This is a really beautiful piece and I love how you used the prompt to tell a story. Certainly one of the best pieces I've read on Write the World. Keep up the good work! :)

over 2 years

I Remember the End

PROMPT: I Remember

This is so beautiful! The way you expanded on the prompt is incredible, unexpected, and amazing. You really thought outside the bubble and came out with something truly spectacular. I never thought this prompt could be used to tell such a complicated story. Thumbs up! :)

over 2 years

The Mushroom

PROMPT: Becoming Human

To me this is referring to atomic bombs, incognito. Tell me if I'm wrong, but either way, I love it. I love how you build up on the poem, every stanza becomes more intense. Don't worry about it being bad, I think this piece great! Keep up the good work, I look forward to seeing more of your writing on WTW. :)

over 2 years

Ice+Storm=Ice Storm

FREE WRITING

It really radiates the anticipation of storm brewing. This piece is super! Thumbs up! :)

over 2 years

The Wall

FREE WRITING

Hello! I didn't feel like the typical peer review questions above applied to this piece, so I decided to write my review in the additional comment section. First of all, I just want to say that I enjoyed this essay immensely. Mainly because it wasn't pushy, like most political pieces I've read. You didn't force your opinions on me, try to bully me into agreeing with you, or curse to get your point across. Reading it was like having a intelligent conversation with someone. It was calm, logical, you pointed out some very arguments from both perspectives, and I actually took my time reading it, instead of rushing through it, like I usually do with political essays. As I read, I became more and more immersed into what you were saying, which in my opinion is the main idea of any piece of writing; making someone care enough about what you're saying to stop and think about it. I like how you were neutral. You didn't weigh too much on one side, or the other, basically leaving the reader to decide for themselves what their opinion is. It was from an informative stand point, which is hard to find. Everything I've ever read on the subject is "This wall is the worst thing ever, because blah blah blah..." or "This wall is the greatest thing ever, because blah blah blah..." You got straight to the point, and let me develop my own viewpoint, which I really appreciate. Thank you so much for writing this! Good job! You made a couple typos. I highlighted them, in case you want to correct them. I also added a couple suggestions. Thanks again!

over 2 years

The Wind in Our Arms, or A Lovely Shade, A Beloved Carpet

FREE WRITING

This is really great! Thank you so much for sharing this! It's nice to know some people can still write beautiful poetry. :) Keep up the good work!

over 2 years

Existence

FREE WRITING

Good job! This is a really interesting piece. :)

over 2 years

The Moor of Elk Pine

PROMPT: Open Prompt

This is a superb, definitely one of the best pieces I've read on Write the World. Keep up the good work! :)

over 2 years

Social media: Is it good or bad?

PROMPT: Op-Ed Competition 2017

This is a really good essay. You brought up some very good points on both the pros and cons of social media, which I liked because you didn't make the piece one sided and instead gave us both points of view, finishing with your opinion and letting the readers decide for themselves. Good job and good luck! :)

over 2 years

Some times you gotta make choices for the people you love most, because you care so much and don't wanna see them get hurt

FREE WRITING

This is very good essay on why we need to take action and help the people we love. A lot of people never seem to want to approach their family members or friends on the subject because they might hurt their feeling. I think it's better feeling than person dead. Thank you for addressing this subject so well! You should try publishing this in a local magazine. Good job and good luck at writing in the future! I like your pieces a lot! :)

over 2 years

A Book's Life

PROMPT: Becoming Human

I really love this piece! It's one of the best I've read on Write the World and I'm really happy I found it! The way you personify books is incredible! :)

over 2 years

Perseverance

PROMPT: This I Believe

This a wonderful piece, especially because it's a first hand report. You know from experience what effort can do and are trying to tell the world about it. You are very lucky to have such a strong family. Good job!

over 2 years

The elements' paradoxes

PROMPT: Beyond Reason

I love how you make comparisons between water and elements, and the way you think of things at another angle. Good job! Keep up the good work! :)

over 2 years

Drown

FREE WRITING

This is a very well written piece, you are an excellent writer. :)

over 2 years

10 Opinions

PROMPT: Your View

This is a great piece! Keep up the good work! :)

over 2 years

The Ghosts

FREE WRITING

This is such a terrific piece! Good job and I can't wait to read more of your writing! :) Oh and I also wanted to say thank you so much for taking the time to review my piece Maybe! :) I edited it, published it again, and deleted the old version before I remembered to reply to your review. :/ Thanks for the advice! :)

over 2 years

Running

PROMPT: WILD

This is such a nice piece! Good job! :)

over 2 years

The Usual Problem

FREE WRITING

This is a lovely piece, and I don't mean the subject is lovely, of course, it's just that the way it's written is so beautiful. It's really a touching narrative. You are a really good writer!

over 2 years

Fireworks

PROMPT: 1 Photo, 100 Words

Good job! Keep up the good work. :)

over 2 years

10 Opinions

PROMPT: Your View

Good job! :)

over 2 years

Sounds of the Sky

PROMPT: Music Is

This is a beautiful piece! Good job! :)

over 2 years

Escaping

FREE WRITING

This is such a beautiful piece! Good job! Keep up the good work! :)

over 2 years

I Believe in the Impossible

PROMPT: This I Believe

This is an amazing piece! I love it! This is seriously one of the best compositions I've ever read on Write the World. Good job and keep up the terrific work! :)

over 2 years

You'll Be Alright

FREE WRITING

Good job! this is a really intriguing piece and I would like to read more if you ever continue it. Keep up the good work! :)

over 2 years

agony

FREE WRITING

This is so sad, but it's such an excellent piece. I felt so bad when my grandmother died. I still do, and for a very long time it felt as though nothing could make it better. You are really a terrific writer. Good job, and I'm sorry you had to go through it.

over 2 years

Her Little Fairy

PROMPT: Everyday Magic

I really liked this! It made me smile. Thumbs up! Keep up the good work! :)

over 2 years

Starlight

PROMPT: The Light Gets In

This is a very delightful one liner! It's hard to write something in just one sentence, but you did a really good job! :)

over 2 years

Discrete World Piolt

PROMPT: Cast of Characters

This is really exciting! I would love to watch the pilot! Good job!

over 2 years

Flaws and Dead Things

FREE WRITING

This is truly a beautiful piece. The end was not at all what I expected it to be at the beginning. This is really one of the best pieces I've ever read on Write the World. :)

over 2 years

Opinions

PROMPT: Your View

over 2 years

Believe

PROMPT: This I Believe

Hi! This is a spectacular piece! It made me really happy and gave me an energetic feeling! Thumbs up and keep up the good work! :)

over 2 years

It's Not Fair

FREE WRITING

This is a very graceful sounding piece. Keep up the good work! :)

over 2 years

Bravery

FREE WRITING

I really like this piece! Good job! :)

over 2 years

Bubble Dreams

PROMPT: Open Prompt

I like this piece a lot! It's so cute and carefree! Keep up the good work! :)

over 2 years

Final Poems

PROMPT: Open Prompt

Good job! this is a terrific piece! I'd like to read more of your writing! :)

over 2 years

Red

PROMPT: WILD

This is such a cute piece! Keep up the good work! :-)

over 2 years

Unbroken

PROMPT: Two in a Canoe

Good job at writing a lovely portrayal of canoeing! Keep up the good work and good writing! :)

over 2 years

Solace

PROMPT: The Peace of Wild Things

This piece is amazing! Good job! :)

almost 3 years

An Aluminum Prop

PROMPT: Missing “E”

I really like this! Good job!

almost 3 years

Twists and Turns

FREE WRITING

This a beautifully written piece. :) Good job and keep writing!

almost 3 years

The Lonely Mountain

PROMPT: Becoming Human

I really like this piece! :) Good job!

almost 3 years

December

PROMPT: 10 Words

I like your list. :)

almost 3 years

US

PROMPT: Newsworthy

This is a good portrayal of what's going on in U.S. (this is coming from an American citizen). I like the way you weren't selective or bias in your report. News should be facts not opinions. Thumbs up! :)

almost 3 years

Modern Poems for an Old-Fashioned Lover (#22 Free Verse)- His Idiosyncrasies

FREE WRITING

This is a marvelous account of playing music. Sometimes when I'm listening to it or playing my piano, I feel a feeling that's too wonderful to define. You came very close to quintessential portrayal of it. Thumbs up! I really like your writing! :)

almost 3 years

Paper Moon

FREE WRITING

I really like this piece! Good job! :)

almost 3 years

Cartography

PROMPT: Writing Synapses

I like this prompt. It looks like a lot of fun! Keep up the good work! :)

almost 3 years

Rain Race

FREE WRITING

almost 3 years

Liftoff

FREE WRITING

I really like the theme of this piece, since I love space. The writing is very good, and like I said above it was realistic and made me feel like I was actually there. Good job! :)

almost 3 years

I Like The Fourteenth of February

FREE WRITING

I like both of the endings, because they're different. Ending 1 would be best if you were giving the poem to the girl, but Ending 2 is directed at a wider audience. I like this piece!

almost 3 years

Sea Storm

FREE WRITING

This perspective is really different than what I'm used to in traditional writing, and I like it a lot. Not the usual boring description. :-) And the description of the ocean waves is so life-like, I felt like I was actually at the beach during a hurricane.

almost 3 years

Homecoming

FREE WRITING

I really like this piece, because it's so sweet. I think a lot of families can relate to this and that sacrifice every soldier makes to protect their country is beautiful. I really like this piece! :-)

almost 3 years

Time

FREE WRITING

I really like this! It's a very touching, pretty piece. Keep writing! :)

almost 3 years

Embarrassment

PROMPT: Emotion by Association

A very accurate description of embarrassment. Good job!

almost 3 years

Autobiography

PROMPT: What Came Before

I really liked this piece, because it's almost from a detached point of view and the writing style is comforting, like swinging. :-) I also like the quote.

almost 3 years

Jonathan Lloyd Life

PROMPT: Mixtape

Nice list. Lots of great songs on it!

almost 3 years

Modern Poems for an Old-Fashioned Lover (#19 Sonnet)- Letters

FREE WRITING

I liked this, because it was so touching and emotional. Being away from someone you love is something almost anyone can relate to at one point of there lives. The words seemed to flow from the page, reading it was quite enjoyable. Thank you! Keep up the good work!

almost 3 years

What I Dream

FREE WRITING

Good job! I enjoyed the read. Keep up the good work! :-)

almost 3 years

Be yourself

PROMPT: Why I Write

You are exactly right! I love this piece! Thumbs up! :-)

almost 3 years

Differences

FREE WRITING

Thumbs up! :-)

almost 3 years

-

PROMPT: The Light Gets In

I liked this, because it was inspirational.

almost 3 years

The Camp

FREE WRITING

Does Michael and Aaron's dad really have cancer?

almost 3 years

Hottest day in summer. (a discriptive essay)

FREE WRITING

I really like this piece. It's so lovely, and the descriptions are so accurate it makes me feel as though I was actually there. Keep on writing! :-)

almost 3 years

To See the World

PROMPT: What Came Before

I like this piece, because it's exciting and adventures, it makes me feel like exploring. :-)

almost 3 years

Emotions

FREE WRITING

I like this because it's so compassionate and driving. :-)

almost 3 years

Finn Jean and the Framed

PROMPT: TV Pilot Competition 2017

Thumbs up! Keep up the good work! :-)

almost 3 years

1942

PROMPT: Time Traveler

I really like this writing style. :-)

almost 3 years

​Running Away

PROMPT: What Came Before

Good job! :-)

almost 3 years

Journey to Somewhere

PROMPT: TV Pilot Competition 2017

I like the descriptions of the scenery. It makes me feel as though I'm actually there.

almost 3 years

No One Cares

FREE WRITING

It's very short, but quite intriguing and convincing. I like it. :-)

almost 3 years

Life Changing Moment

PROMPT: Writing Synapses

almost 3 years