Bo Bednar (United States) liked I'M SO EXCITED!!!! by Kaitlyn ❄ (United States)
about 2 months ago
Bo Bednar (United States) published:
I Cannot Continue This Way
PROMPT: Acrostic Verse
I find myself trapped under an invisible weight
Curled up in the fetal position
Agonizingly close to where I need to be
Never quite there
Never really sure if I want to be.
'Oh, but you have it better than so many others'
The mantra I repeat to try and keep going
Coming up with excuses to stay in bed
Only ten more minutes, Mom.
Now I feel guilty
There's no reason I should feel this bad
I've had everything handed...
about 2 months ago
Bo Bednar (United States) liked The Hundred Deaths by Puja Shah (India)
2 months ago
Bo Bednar (United States) published:
Outburst
PROMPT: 25 Words
"Be powerful, like a man," they told him.
So he swallowed his feelings once again, just like always.
Too much pressure causes things to explode.
2 months ago
Bo Bednar (United States) reviewed:
An Honesty Inquiry
PROMPT: Monostitch
I would delete a few ellipses (3 is standard, and looks more professional), or replace them altogether with a colon. Otherwise, keep it the same! It's great.
2 months ago
Bo Bednar (United States) published:
Depression
PROMPT: Monostitch
Finding myself in the fetal position, every breath soaked in pain.
Another one, titled 'Locker Room'
In the shower, nobody can see your tears.
2 months ago
Bo Bednar (United States) published:
Depression
PROMPT: Monostitch
Finding myself in the fetal position, every breath soaked in pain.
2 months ago
Bo Bednar (United States) liked Obi by Your Alien Author. (United States)
4 months ago
Bo Bednar (United States) reviewed:
Obi
PROMPT: Monster Flash Fiction Competition 2018
I really like the entire last paragraph. I can feel the emotion that Obi is both feeling and witnessing, and his desire to be able to know her better. Honestly, I would leave the wording of that paragraph alone because...
4 months ago