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I wrote both in third-person and first-person, although I wonder if it clashes too much. Should I stick with only one perspective?
I can't believe this story is written at 100 words long! It is very well written and sequenced. I was actually drawn in by the first stanza. They write, "Naive and careless like any other child." this sentence clicked in my head and also tells me that the author is pretty self-conscious and it continues with the second stanza.
The use of perspective and alteration between third person and first person is astonishing! I really like how the 1-2 stanza are in third person and the 3-4 stanzas are in first person. They also described things in their story well like for example, "Finding my own path selflessly", which is a beautiful sentence also adds on with self-conscious author.
I love it please keep writing! I don't see anything to add, maybe make one more sentence for the first stanza to be the same length as the others below it. Other than that I don't have much to say than this was amazing to read. I was really touched by it!!