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I really like the freedom of this piece, pretty ironic I guess. What I'm saying is your flexibility and writing techniques. Using metaphors, expressive imagery and pulling all that together in a coherent story structure. You describe exactly how your experience as a ballerina in a music box feels and how that would look like. I feel like you amped up the creativity of this piece and wrote about her really well. Capturing the smallest details and expanding that to the fullest. It's line after line that keeps on drawing you in with each new pushing words used to express that feeling of freedom.
It's kinda ironic how you capture the freedom of a ballerina in a music box who is confined to her feet on the ground, then turn to how she experiences that freedom when she dances gracefully. Where nothing binds her both physically and mentally when she dances. It's really quite a metaphor for life and such. How sometimes we are binded to things that prevent us from experiencing freedom and flexibility, and we yearn for those things to happen, to let us free. And once it happens, once we experience freedom, we feel completely free from the world and its confinements. How once we start, we can never back down, not even for a second. For me,the story of the ballerina in the music box represents the short, but liberating times of freedom we have and how much that changes us and calls us.
I really liked this story. It's very human and combines a lot of good techniques and strategies together. I think it would be fun to see an audience for the ballerina. I guess it depends on the type of music box but usually they are activated by someone. I think it would be interesting to explore the aspects of how the ballerina's freedom in dancing makes another person wonder or left in awe. Great job with this piece!