BizzleWrites

Australia

I'm Issy.
I'm 14 and an aspiring artist and author.
She/her
Black Lives matter.
Likes:
Bi puns
Murder mystery TV shows
Art
Shakespeare poetry
Dislikes:
I can't even be bothered writing them all down
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Goodbi
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Remember to write even if you think you are bad at it, you're not

Um, what do I call this?

May 21, 2020

A glance,
A fleeting moment,
Your eyes are bright pools,
Your smile is the world,
One moment and it's over,
I could almost miss it,
But I see it like I see you,
And it means the world to me,
The sky is in your eyes.
I wrote this, I really need reviews.

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  • mia_:)

    Wow! This is great! I love the use of the word "fleeting" and your sensory details! A tip is to think about your punctuation. Is this really all one sentence, with commas from each line? Maybe break it up a little. Great job! :D


    12 months ago
  • Sol noctis

    It's amazing!!
    And yes you could name it something like a glance or a surreptitious glance... Or something like a sneak peek into someone beautiful....uh no that's too long... OK
    You know what the title will just come to you and it would take you a while to understand it has come.... But it will.


    12 months ago
  • acrosstheuniverse28

    SO beautiful! Awesome job and making a little glance so important. Maybe for a title you could do "Just a Glance", or "A Little Glance"? Some variation of that... ;)


    12 months ago