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Message to Readers
For this piece, my goal was to inspire imagination with a hint of darkness and confusion. Please advise/comment on how well you think I pulled this off.
The mystery and ambiguity of the piece draws me in, and I was especially curious to find out what you meant by "engage."
"His tired mind chooses to ignore the time and examine the blank room. No features. No exits." This line creates drama and suspense, and the two short sentences vary sentence structure and make the piece flow well. Also, this is one of the few lines written in present tense, which I think sounds better for the piece.
I liked the way you broke up the piece and added drama by interrupting periodically with the countdown. It effectively showed that this really did occur in a minute, and it gave an air of apathy contrasted with the character's panic, which provides a great image. I love the vagueness of this piece, but although I have said this a few times, I think it would sound better in present tense, which would create more drama and would get the reader more in the moment.