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Had to fix some tense problems
I love this plot twist. It's lighter and happier than ones I've read, and the fact it's hilarious adds to the story. Everything about this piece makes me smile.
It's a short story, so I like that it's to the point, yet still includes enough detail and description. The characters are different, and obviously young and children, which makes me love them!
How old are the kids? If Liz had to come home early, did she come home with the Mom, or herself?
How did you think of a plot twist like this? It's so creative and unique!
I love this, best of luck in the contest!