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PalmLeaf

Thailand

An aspiring writer chiseling away at her block.
With a toothpick.
Also I'm a Ravenclaw. Go Claws!

Message to Readers

I've never written poetry before so I'd very much appreciate any and all comments and criticism! Thank you in advance.

Other People's Poems Are So Much Better Than Mine

December 13, 2018

FREE WRITING

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Envy is
a flash of lightning
across a blue and cloudless sky,
a wave of cold
washing the warm, sunny shore,
a roar of
bitter silence, so cruel
is Envy.
1. The title is, of course, a compliment to the poem.
2. This is my first attempt at poetry (I don't know how English poetry works so I tried my best!).
3. I was inspired by the Emotion Without Feelings prompt, but I just couldn't confine this to one line so I had to make it a piece of free writing instead.

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5 Comments
  • PalmLeaf

    Thank you all so much for the feedback! You’ve made my day :)


    10 months ago
  • rainandsonder

    dang, this is your first poem? this is fantastic! the metaphors you used captured envy perfectly.


    10 months ago
  • AbigailSauble

    This is beautiful! Great descriptions. =)


    10 months ago
  • Quille

    I think the title is a liar..... :DD


    10 months ago
  • Doktor Habit

    goD if this ain't a mood--
    this is really good!! keep writing!!


    10 months ago