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Idk what this is. I think the clarity is a little off? Peer review please! <3
This poem very effectively uses the five senses to describe a variety of different emotions - of course, the prompt only asked for one sentence, but this poem expands and addresses guilt, shame, fear and disappointment! The anaphora of the similes (is like a) at the beginning of each stanza were very successful in leading the reader into the next comparison between the emotion in question and each element.
Since this is already a poem rather than a sentence, I would say that it works well in this already-alternative genre!
Excellent work writing a vivid poem that really tackles the idea of describing emotions from a sensory point of view. I particularly enjoyed the personification in "Blowing down your exposed neck". To make this piece even better, consider what image/idea you want your reader to finish with - what exactly do you mean by "the Truth?"