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"When I asked myself: ‘describe the light,’ /She said: everything you drain from the world. " Yeah, that is hands down the best line for me. The way you refer to yourself as "she" adds a certain power to the already strong lines. It's just one of those things you read that sends a chill up your spine when you read it because it was so good.
Honestly, your vocabulary and technique is amazing. Your use of italics really adds something small but effective in the piece. It separates your thoughts from what you see and that extra facet to the narrator's perspective rounds out the piece perfectly. The motif and symbolism of stars really ties it all together into one. The way you use structure in such a free form, but at the same time, ordered way is also quite refreshing. A lot of poetry is very structured and a lot of poetry that isn't seems too lackluster in how ideas are conveyed. You, however, have pulled it off very well.
This is an amazing work. A few things in word choice can be improved, as with most pieces, but all in all, you have a talent. This work gives the impression that you are a very detail oriented writer and arguably no trait is better in writing poetry. Be proud of yourself for this work.