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The personification. I never thought of Fall as a being before, and also, the fact that Fall will inevitably turn into Winter makes the "trying to dodge" bit have that much more impact.
Fading hope. The writer creates a sliver of possible hope, hanging the leaf out there, the leaf representing all of fall, but then it has to tumble lifelessly to the ground.
Wow, this piece was packed with meaning. Literary devices helped to enhance the haiku that embodied a transition in life we all know so well. Great job!