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way beyond what this prompt intended, but who cares, it's my writing.
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First, I just want to say that I love how you chose to expand the prompt into an entire poem! It's great that you felt inspired to put your own twist on the original idea.
The imagery in this poem (and all of your writing) is simply beautiful. Some of my favorite lines were "to let its roots finger the/ foreign soil under its girth" and "i will lick the sweetness from my palms". This kind of language makes the world you've built feel tangible, yet vague and surreal at the same.
Many, many feelings. Each stanza contained a shred of hope, only for it to be dashed by the end. For example, the beginning of the second stanza is really sweet, because it emphasizes that family is true love. But the last few lines bring the reader crashing back to reality: even though this day with family might be beautiful, there is no tomorrow. It's also interesting to note that this poem didn't make me feel scared or anxious at all. The narrator seems to have accepted this is the end of the world, and there is no panic or worry, only nostalgia and peacefulness. Instead of fearing oblivion, they welcome it with open arms.
I'm so glad I found your poem to read! I love how you expanded on the original prompt in such a gorgeous, intricate way. You excel at subtly weaving emotions in with lush imagery, which really beckons the reader onward. Plus, your poetry flows very smoothly, and the ending left me feeling sad but content.