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omicron7889

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(also if you have any work you would like me to review, just drop me a comment on any one of my pieces and I'll happily review away)

Message to Readers

Don't do drugs. Seriously. Just don't.

Crows In The Mind

January 22, 2019

FREE WRITING

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If souls could be tainted, yours is dead
The neurotransmitters inside your head
Have been distorted, changed and restrained
You've created your own shackles and chains

'Murder, murder' dark shapes cry out harshly
Their bodies circling over shamelessly
'Liar, liar' they hiss from closed beaks
Causing blood to rise to your cheeks

'Run away, naive child, run away.'
And once hearing that you don’t hesitate
To tear your way out of reality
To abscond, to escape, to flee

From whatever way you try to bolt
Using any kind of adrenaline jolt
A choice to resist or to succumb
You chose the easy way, and went numb

But your legs are made of dreams
And they don't work as well as they seem
Each movement sluggish to exhaustion
But you do not have any other options

The birds almost big enough to be ravens
They're coming to satisfy their cravings
Your guilt is the nectar that they claim
And their ambrosia is your bubbling shame

They were right, and they were never wrong
The dark habits that always came along
For as long as you let them, they're alive.
The crows circle once, and take their final dive

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17 Comments
  • omicron7889

    YES SURE I'M SORRY I ONLY READ THIS FIVE DAYS LATER I'LL GET RIGHT TO IT


    5 months ago
  • Quille

    BTW, I was wondering if you would please review this piece for me:
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/99991/version/190166
    Title is: A POV Exercise - Elfboy Chapter 1
    I'd be more than happy to review for you in return; I'm fairly good :)


    5 months ago
  • omicron7889

    mhm and suppositories too I presume?


    6 months ago
  • aggressivebackflip

    ah if only white depressants and stimulants in the form of powder could be snorted through ear canals


    6 months ago
  • omicron7889

    @nezi_nes tenk you I owe it to my lack of coherent thoughts


    6 months ago
  • omicron7889

    @The Bubbling Pen
    It's no problem at all :) I quite enjoy writing reviews


    6 months ago
  • nezi_nes

    @omicron That is awesome. Your mind is awesome.


    6 months ago
  • The Bubbling Pen

    Hey Omicron :) Thanks so much for sending in a review!!!!!!! <3


    6 months ago
  • The Bubbling Pen

    Hey Omicron :) Thanks so much for sending in a review!!!!!!! <3


    6 months ago
  • omicron7889

    Woop thanks for liking it!


    6 months ago
  • Plausible.Poems

    I like this!


    6 months ago
  • omicron7889

    @Quille
    Heyy thank you so much!!


    6 months ago
  • omicron7889

    @nezi_nes
    Inspiration uhhhh.... just thinking of random stuff and wanted to include crows in a poem, because of the more negative imagery they have. Then remembered that the collective noun for crows was 'a murder' and originally wanted to right something about someone committing a crime but that was too boring so settled on the crows being a metaphor for addictive thoughts and their destruction of our physical and mental health. 'take their final dive' is when the person finally overdoses (i could deconstruct this poem but honestly eh I'm supposed to be revising for my history mocks so i'll leave that)


    6 months ago
  • Quille

    Awesome! :DDD


    6 months ago
  • nezi_nes

    Inspiration?


    6 months ago
  • omicron7889

    Hey, thanks for your comment!

    And I will definitely review your pieces. I'll drop a comment on one of your recent pieces the minute I'm done.


    6 months ago
  • The Bubbling Pen

    Great message that you carry through the piece and I love the rhythm of your poetry - it flows so well and is fun to read aloud as well! Awesome work on this poem <3

    Ps. Just referring to your profile... would you mind reviewing a piece of mine? Either "It Started With A Note" or "We Are All Lost" thank you so much!!!!!!! :)


    6 months ago