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A Breath Into Silence

United States

She likes sugar, notebooks, and existence. A dreamer, scientist, and musician. In love with the night sky. Incurably shy. Always willing to listen.

It's nice to meet you!

Message to Readers

This is what happens when a writer asks themselves "How does a story without visuals work?" and proceeds to write that story.

I can say I've learned something really interesting about storytelling today- visual descriptions aren't as necessary as I was told. Who knew?

It turns out Saturn is beautiful after all ----- but I've run out of words to describe it

January 21, 2019

FREE WRITING

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Shh-shhhhhh-rat-tat-shhhhhh-ratatatatarat-kkksss------ksss---
Thunk

A long exhale. "Ash, help me set up the telescope."

Rustling, crunch, crunch, shhhh-shh--ratatata-shhhhh-------------------shhhh-------shh----- 

Rusty bolts protesting against adjustment ---REEEEEEEEEEEEEEECH-----

"Evan, where's the socket wrench?"

Clink-clank-clatter
The sound of metal smacking against a palm.
REEECH, shh-ratat-shhhhh-------ratat-------------------shh---------------shh
The sound of an owl in the distance

"Hey, the viewfinder's actually right for once."

grooooaaaan, hhh-haaaa--hhhh-haaaa
Shuffling, crunch-crunch, ratatatata-shhh----shh------ratatatataratatatata-----------shhhhhhh----------------------------

"......Is that Saturn?"

"...Move over, lemme see, Ash."

Shuffle, crunch-crunch-shhhhhhhhh

"Wow, yeah."

Shhhhhh---------------------------shhhhhhh-------------------
The wind fades into the distance.
I really don't have an explanation. I'm sorry if this is confusing.

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3 Comments
  • luluwrites111

    I love the lack of flowery description and the dialogue that speaks true to real life experiences.


    4 months ago
  • Johanna

    Aww I love this... I weirdly love your lack of description and the simplicity of this. Just beautiful.


    5 months ago
  • RNE

    i really like this piece=D


    5 months ago