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my favorite things about this piece were probably 1. "i lit myself ablaze instead" and 2. the metaphor that compared you to a house. 1. "i lit myself ablaze instead" was always placed as its own stanza and that along with the repetition made it so strong and compelling?? 2. the house metaphor was perfect. you described boarding up the windows, blasting up the heating, running a car engine without driving it anywhere, fire and CO2 alarms--such a brilliant way to write? it kept it mysterious as a metaphor yet at the same time i knew exactly what you were talking about. wow.
i actually love the balance between what you know and what you don't. the powerful ending gives it closure but doesn't tell me everything, which i like!
i just really love this metaphor? you used it SO WELL. great job!