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dear explosive star

January 14, 2019

FREE WRITING

10
& maybe the heading says it all because
i've never liked explosions:
no matter what man makes 
they'll always be natural---
it'll always be natural to blow up

but i should've known the only thing that
can see through destruction
is time
so i know you're a forever away
& living a billion years from now
but my star still shines
from an eternity ago
& if you open your eyes,
you can see me

hey, i wish you could
wake me up again
because our sun
died with its legacy
i just wish you could
rebirth my impermanence;
time is the only thing uneven
in the cosmos

dear explosive star
we're all just fragments of our odd little universe
timers waiting to bomb
stars waiting to sink into
our own nonexistence
dear explosive star
can't you feel the blackness
ticking your life away?
dear explosive star
i've exploded &
you're waiting

but while you're awake
you can open your eyes
& from a billion years in the past
you can see me.
because light has to travel between stars and because many stars are trillions of lightyears apart, the night sky we see is never present.  the stars nearest to us are showing us light ~7 years old.  most are showing us light that are over a million years old.  that's what this poem is about.
and yes, all of that is internet information.  so feel free to correct me.

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7 Comments
  • rosemarywisdom

    Whoa, it never fails to amaze me how talented you are :O


    3 months ago
  • Katelyn._.Rose

    This is beautiful, the repetition of "dear explosive star," is an amazing touch!


    5 months ago
  • Anha

    oof this is incredible! the last stanza really hit home for me, projecting how detached we are from the universe in a letter-poem format. i love this!


    5 months ago
  • paperbird

    thank you so much!


    5 months ago
  • asteria

    wow, this is so natural and real and so important! your piece is so authentic and aesthetic and, i have no words


    5 months ago
  • acrosstheskysky

    wowowowowwww i love this i had to read it multiple times over because wow. and i love how you based this off stars and light and science it's amazing!


    5 months ago
  • loveletterstosappho

    i love love love love this so very much and might write a review sometime when i'm not so tired


    5 months ago