someoneyetnooneatall

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I would like any feedback on this. It is a very personal piece to me but any reviews are appreciated.

Death Tale

January 10, 2019

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You were her drug
She was addicted 
Yet she would never know
Never saw the picture that was depicted
Because she could never let you go
All the pain that you were causing
Came with bruises that started to show

But you "said you were sorry"
So I had to let it go
"It won't happen again" you'd said
But I knew it was a lie
Because every time I saw her
She had fear in her eyes
Tried to save her from the monster
That had caught us by surprise
But in the end I was too late
For this is the story of how she died

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5 Comments
  • The Bubbling Pen

    nooo this was so sad and really heart-felt. Awesome job, you really let readers feel a deeper emotion in this piece. <3


    over 1 year ago
  • Winter

    Outstanding. I could never write something that amazing. So raw full of emotion. Good luck with life.


    over 1 year ago
  • LyraLynne

    Wow this is an outstanding, moving piece that is so full of raw emotion. My thoughts are with you.


    over 1 year ago
  • Lopiekins

    Prayers for everyone involved


    over 1 year ago
  • Lopiekins

    You are incredibly brave and selfless to put this up for others to see. It's beautifully written, and I wouldn't change a thing about it. You wrote from the heart, and I feel as if I experienced the tragedy myself. You are an amazing writer; never stop.


    over 1 year ago