Below, you'll see any text that was highlighted with comments from the reviewer.
I love the plot that seems to be developing here....... Is Reaper gonna be a rotten bully or is he going to turn out a bit more like Prince Charming??? Luna's character is really awesome and I like her mom too :DD Your descriptions are very apt and vocabulary choices are solid :DD
More on the Shadow World Online game would be awesome; I find it very intriguing! I'm also really wanting to know more about Reaper, his character has a ton of potential to be either good or bad :SK Of course, What happens after the cliffhanger??
Great job on this!! It's super believable//relatable! :DD
I'm sorry it took so long to get to reviewing; I'll get the other two done asap :D
Thanks for entering my contest (so long ago! :) and keep writing!!!! :DDD