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The headline is what grabbed my attention, as I was interested in this movie when it came out and haven't gotten around to seeing it, so I wanted someone else's thoughts on the film. I like how the author put the name of the film in the headline, as I saw other writers did not always do this, which leaves the audience not knowing what film is being reviewed.
I love how the author wrote this entire review. Especially his first sentence, "...as if they were simply an annoying mistake in a beautiful picture you were drawing." After I read this, I sat for a second before continuing, thinking about how the author wrote this so well that I immediately got his point, but it is such a strong statement that you linger on the line. I also really like how the author brought in his own experience to help him review the film. Saying that he himself is gay shows the audience that he is close to the film and that he saw himself in this film often. This allows the reader to understand someone else's perspective which is important in a movie review.
I believe that this author used many great example, incorporating and referencing other works by the director and also speaking about specific things that happened in the film. There was nowhere present in this review where I felt I needed more information, the author gave a wonderful synopsis without giving too much about the film away and offered his own insight, highlighting the best and worst parts of the motion picture.
The only thing I can encourage the author to do is reread his piece over and see where he can add more to it. Since this draft is already so close to perfect, the author can really only make it even more special by adding more information, more insight, and more details (even though they are not needed, because this is a beautiful review.)
Although I want to win this competition very much and I spent many long nights on my own review, I would not be disappointed if I lost and this author won. His review was something special. I am not sure if it was the author's beautifully written ideas and summary, his own insight into the movie, or his criticisms of the film, but the author really made me want to see this film. Some people just seem to have a natural talent for writing, and this author seems to have it.