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Peer Review by Zoe (Australia)

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Where were you?

By: Sarah Grimson


PROMPT: Where Were You?

Where were you? 

when the sun went down,

when the moon came up,

Where were you?

 

Where were you?

when I needed a shoulder to cry on,

A light to guide me,

Where were you?

 

Where were you?

I needed you,

You were gone,

 Where were you?

Can you come back?


Message to Readers

Well this is interesting...
constructive critique,
thanks!


Peer Review

I loved the line 'Can you come back' because it makes the reader think and gives them a feeling of mystery.

The way you wrote it gave the piece feeling and I loved that!

Reviewer Comments

Your writing is awesome and I love it!