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I just made some quick adjustments to the story. Adding some more details and fleshing out some new characters! Any ideas or suggestions would be awesome. Thank you amazing people :)
A broken girl whose boyfriend was killed
The emotion, along with the slow way the author unfolds the story for us
The entire first paragraph has beautiful dialogue between the two characters
There is an air of suspense, as we are given most of our information by Alice at the beginning of the story, and grief/empathy as we learn the backstory of the girl
A strong sense of hope for this young woman, along with a growing sadness regarding what she's already been through, and still has to go through
A few punctuation/ capitalization errors, but a beautifully written piece.