Yosemite 6

Christy Wisdom

United States

Hello people! What to say? I'm a Christian girl. I like to write. I write tons of poetry, some short stories, and other things.
I like
NARUTO
Imagine Dragons
LOTR
Harry Potter
Agents of SHIELD
Artemis Fowl
My Hero Academia
God bless you!

Message to Readers

A song/poem. First time actually writing something like a song. I'd love some feedback on how I did, and if it'd just be better as a poem.

War

January 7, 2019

FREE WRITING

5
Verse 1
Maybe I'll just hide away,
Wait till it's all over
But it's never over
Please let it be over

Verse 2
Maybe I'll just say to you
It'll be okay, to you
But I don't know if it'll ever be
Waiting till the war's over to see

Pre-chorus
And maybe I just need to hear
Stay strong, it won't be long
Reinforcement's a-coming,
Redemption's a-coming,
Don't give up just yet

Chorus
So I'ma keep on fighting, I'll fight
Till the end of the day
Till the end of the age
Won't give up,
We'll never surrender
We'll fight till the end

Verse 3
The ammo's low,
We're running for the trenches,
Running out of time
The enemy's on us, oh

Verse 4 
Is anybody coming
We've given up hope 
The cavalry's deserted us
At least our death'll be glorious

Pre-chorus

Chorus

Bridge
And maybe I'll just run away,
The coward's way is the way to go,
But no,
I'll fight for you,
I'll die for you
I'm sorry I'm not coming home

Chorus

Verse 5
A last hurrah
We'll go down fighting
They're coming at us
Fuses lighting 


 

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3 Comments
  • Christy Wisdom

    Aww, thank you guys so much! I really appreciate the feedback :)


    6 months ago
  • Made4Love

    This is great! I'd love to hear your words put to music!


    6 months ago
  • muppet

    I really really like this. Lyrically and structurally it reminds me of many of my favorite songs and songwriters. It reminds me of "Don't Give Up" by Peter Gabriel and Kate Bush, which is a huge song by extremely talented songwriters of the 80s, so it's a compliment! Not to mention your song shares the same emotionally tug and pull of that one, I feel inspired, I want to fight, I don't want to give up. It also gives me almost a battle-cry sort of feel reminding me of the movies Braveheart or The Gray and I truly enjoyed reading it! I can't sing or play instruments, but if I could, I'd do this!


    6 months ago