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Fleetfoot

January 5, 2019

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There was once a young girl 
Who dreamed she could dance 
She’d watch people and videos 
Soaking it all up in a trance 

But whenever she tried to move 
Her feet would turn out awkward 
Clumsy, as all the ideas she had 
Evaporated and flew upwards 

So she let it drop for a few years 
The only dancing that took place 
Was in her mind and daydreams 
But the longing still shone on her face 

Parties from popular girls avoided 
Petrified before that pulsing dancefloor 
All those bodies flowing naturally 
Nothing could stop her heading for the door 

The songs cried out to bring her back 
She turned a deaf ear to their pleas 
But as the left that joyful party 
She’d still hear them in the breeze 

little girl, little girl 
 come and try again 
you’ve got what it takes 
there won’t be awkwardness 
  stiffness 
 or pain 


Fear of humiliation killed the hope 
That those words would bring to her 
She scrunched those dreams into a ball 
And time passed with a blur 

The young girl eventually grew up 
And finally at fifteen years of age 
She heard the songs’ pleas once more 
And her heart woke and fluttered in its cage 

little girl, little girl 

They said 

your music still awaits 
     old of body 
  but young of heart 
trust that it’s never too late to start
 

The not-so-young girl opens her ears 
And she spies all those lost years 
With one foot in front of the other 
She starts to learn, unwind her fears 

Along with hope the liveliness came back 
As she created figures on the fly 
She’d no longer linger during parties 
She could walk to that dancefloor, head held high 

When walking past a shop 
Or when a car with windows down 
blared out a quick-beat song 
That’s when she’d dance around town 

It took her a while, that she’ll admit 
To find the passion from long ago 
But now she danced to her heart’s content 
And the music would proudly crow 

  little girl, little girl 
look at how you move! 
your feet are flitting 
   left to right 
how could someone disapprove? 

no awkwardness 
no humiliation 
no pain and no frustration 

   to go after what you want 
   that’s the greatest lesson 

time for me to help another 
  the world is vast 
  and it calls loud 

but you’ll be called Fleetfoot 
    to dance fast and proud 
the world is finally yours 
    so don’t fear it no more
I like shuffle dancing. More specifically, the cutting shapes shuffle. There's this youtube channel called ELEMENTS that does tutorial videos and they're very good. Just in case you wanted to learn to shuffle. It's fun.
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11 Comments
  • omicron7889

    I'm uh yeah sure okay


    10 months ago
  • aggressivebackflip

    snip snip you'ce scool


    10 months ago
  • omicron7889

    Your comment makes me smile :))) Have fun with that channel!


    10 months ago
  • The Bubbling Pen

    I love this poem :) It's so beautiful and uplifting! I'll check out the youtube channel when I get the chance <3


    10 months ago
  • omicron7889

    @nevaredhp Randomly dancing around school to embarrass your friends is AMAZING

    @Quille Oh I get that sudden uncomfortableness when dancing :] I just try to practice as much as possible because I realised the better I could move the more confident I got

    @Johanna Thank youuuu!

    Also I didn't expect to come across that many dancers, whether for fun or taking lessons :P


    10 months ago
  • Johanna

    Awww I love dancing and this was lovely! Amazing job :3


    10 months ago
  • Quille

    And the rhymes! I love how you used awkward and upwards together! Absolutely superb :D


    10 months ago
  • Quille

    This is so relatable and I love the voice you used to convey all the emotions :D I just dance when I feel like it, but I do get embarrassed when I find out someone's watching me :) Trying to overcome that :D
    I really do love this poem also; the combination of the italics in with the rest is very well done :D


    10 months ago
  • nevaredhp

    wow, this reminds me of the days when I took dance classes. Now I don't do anything except randomly dance around at school and embarrass my friends :) good poem. I like the alternating between her internal voice and the narrator.


    10 months ago
  • omicron7889

    *sound of wings flapping*


    10 months ago
  • nezi_nes

    Very well, Fleetfoot. Fly away~~


    10 months ago