paperbird

United States of America

Message to Readers

experimenting with a new style of poetry
feedback appreciated

just let me stay & suck in the world

January 8, 2019

FREE WRITING

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allow me one minute to watch the
mountains draw to curling crags of
water, grant me the
pleasure of watching rain smile &
the rosy cheeks of spring
blossoms; let me stay here—
i want to watch the masses
shift and swing
disappear to the cracks of
mother earth & please
don’t let it go
please just
don’t let it go

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4 Comments
  • R.j.Elsewhere

    Out of all the pieces I had to review - this by far was my favorite.


    about 1 year ago
  • korra4life

    I agree with nevaredhp, I can hear a speaker reading it. Not like slam poetry, but more of a gentler and passionate spoken word.


    about 1 year ago
  • nevaredhp

    The enjambment really draws me in to reading the next line, and I can practically hear a voice reading it like slam poetry. Well done :)


    about 1 year ago
  • Ruthh

    This is so beautiful!


    about 1 year ago