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I really love "lazily tickled" and "A squirrel skittered among the branches above my head like a leaf in the wind." They made me smile. =)
When reading, I felt a summer breeze and sunshine as the character sat in the tree.
It gave me cold chills—not the horror-story kind, but the graceful and smooth, magic-fantasy, Popsicle-in-the-middle-of-summer kind. The last sentence reminded me of The Wizard of Oz but with your own amazing twist to it. I would love to read more to know what happened and what will follow.