Below, you'll see any text that was highlighted with comments from the reviewer.
Message to Readers
I am also planning on writing a poem based off a line in this piece.
"My indecision is a hopeless endeavour in itself."
If there's another line in this piece that stands out to you, please let me know! I would love to write a story/poem based off it and dedicate it to you <3
I really love the concept of this piece!!! It's extremely relatable and your style renders your ideas amazingly; it reads like poetry! The descriptions are awesome and the character shows through super well :DDD
I was really trying to think of something lacking in this piece, but I can't find anything. You did an excellent providing sensory details as well as a lot for the reader to think about.... especially when I'm sitting here at a computer screen... :D
Awesome, awesome piece!! Thanks for entering my contest & I'm sorry it took me so long to get to reviewing it :S