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~on an indeterminate hiatus~
If only that were me every day. Mmmm
Written By: nezi_nes
December 26, 2018
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Ehehehehe thank you :)) also now that you say it, I do see the word "dissipate" fitting in to the poem. Kind words you have, Omicron.
OI YOU PUBLISH A PIECE AND YOU DON'T WARN ME FIRST HOW DARE YOU
I'm kidding :P It's a nice surprise as always
I like the vibe your piece gives out. To me the word that fits well would be 'dissipate' because your choice of words ('plumped' with 'sofa', 'dissolve' with 'dreams') really gives out the impression of coming back from a long day and as you sit down everything goes floof and ahhhhh....vanishes. It's a very relaxing and soothing 23 words.
I love the whimsy you brought into this, beautifully well done!
Wow thank you Luna Lemon for your feedback, it's valuable to me and I appreciate it.
Oooh this is such a creative take on the prompt! I love how you interpreted this as the song style, not just the color. I haven't seen something like it and this piece really stands out. You use such good word choice to match this piece's calming tone: "dangling", "slowing losing momentum", "soft", and "dissolve" showcase this perfectly to create a tone that fits the blues theme.
This is definitely a favorite piece of mine that I've read. Good luck in the competition and keep writing:)
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