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I love how the reader can really feel what the narrator is feeling. The sense of loss as "the days that followed grew cloudy" is really heavy and the imagery further accentuates the loss of the girl.
I would want to know why the girl has become such a "landmark" or "highlight" of the narrator's day. Is it because she skips past the window and makes them feel a little bit happier or is it because she hums along, reminding them of a lost sister? Why is she important to the narrator and what to they miss most about her?
Roses are red
Violets are blue
It seems like the girl
Is important to you :)
I loved your piece - sorry if my comments or highlighting seemed harsh :) I really enjoyed your piece and would love to see this piece extended with more details <3