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RainAndSonder

United States

poetry and short stories - they/them - harry potter (hufflepuff) - amateur guitarist - the beatles -
music - podcasts (esp night vale)
I drew my profile picture.
What if every song, book, poem, or painting was just a metaphor for food?

Message from Writer

"living in the sprawl / dead shopping malls rise / like mountains beyond mountains," - arcade fire

"sullen eyes, your skies are empty / there's no saving you / life and death between your breath and barely breaking through," - heart attack man

lowercase is intentional.

Anyone Need Feedback?

December 19, 2018

FREE WRITING

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    I'm home sick today and really bored, so if anyone has any pieces that they'd like me to read, that'd be great. I'll either review them or like and comment on them, and I'll try to give the best, most in-depth feedback I can. Thanks!

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15 Comments
  • Ryder

    Could you read my 'Dark Voice' series? It would be very helpful, but take your time. I can see you have a lot of other requests :}


    6 months ago
  • The Bubbling Pen

    Hope you're feeling better by now :) Thank you so much for all your comments on my pieces - you should become a motivational speaker!!

    I put this on my #oneblue piece in the comments, but I'll pop it here so you can see it too: Just a tip for flash fiction, I try to find two ways of describing the same thing (generally one is a metaphor and the other is a backstory or emotion) and put it together! I'd love to read one that you come up with :)

    Thanks again for your honest feedback :)


    6 months ago
  • Johanna

    Since you made TwistQ&A and I did it, thought you might want to check it out? Maybe it'll help you feel better (I doubt it); but still, get well soon :)
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/93678/version/177673


    6 months ago
  • paperbird

    part four is up!
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/free_writing/95806


    6 months ago
  • ethereal.otherworldly

    any piece, honestly. thank you <33


    6 months ago
  • Luca

    thanks for doing this...! :P I would love some feedback on this piece. I needs a lot of work >.<
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/92097/version/181295


    6 months ago
  • Christy Wisdom

    I'd love feedback on any of my pieces, especially "wrong" or "Not Goodbye". I think that's what I called it, anyways.. Thanks for doing this!


    6 months ago
  • Juliana

    I'd love feedback on any of my pieces, though specifically my two recent ones. Thanks!


    6 months ago
  • paperbird

    you must be busy now, but if you’re still bored, i always love reviews on letters of víðir chapters. thanks!


    6 months ago
  • Old Sport

    could i get some feedback on any of my newer pieces?


    6 months ago
  • Anha

    I tried my hand at historical fiction in my piece Chimneysweep Bird. If you could give me some feedback that'd be much appreciated!
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/93898/version/178148


    6 months ago
  • fatpanda

    I would love some feedback on 'let me go' or any other piece you find interesting


    6 months ago
  • Lee Fudge

    Could you read my Unchivalrous Knights series? Any Chapter will do


    6 months ago
  • Blotted Ink with a Broken Quill

    Can you do "Growing Down" and only if you have time "A Kingdom in Chaos"


    6 months ago
  • stripedfly

    Heyy I posted the first part of my new novel, "PG for violence", a couple of hours ago and got zero feedback on it, which makes me question whether it's worth it or not. Would you mind commenting on it and letting me know what you think of it? (Please be honest.) Thanks!!
    https://writetheworld.com/groups/1/shared/95680/version/182226


    6 months ago